Chained

Chained

A Poem by Bertha
"

If you'll be a slave for life, atleast you can choose your master for life.

"
I just wanted to be free but he chained me down
Could not believe one fond of the word freedom now wanted me down.
It was okay breaking rules and he helped me all the time
The difference now is, "these are made by him. "
I never knew his gentle lips could hold a terrifying grin
His sweet compliments, he showered me all the time
Now he spur's swords and acid
Is it not this same face you used to adore?
Now you have me in chains.

© 2019 Bertha


Author's Note

Bertha
Anything you notice to be off.. Let me know.

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For a fairly brief message, you sure pour a bunch of intensity into this! What I love most is how your narrator does NOT blame the other person. This is the most realistic & true-to-life for me, becuz we blame ourselves for our bad choices, instead of blaming the person who hurts us. This line sounds "off": "now he spur's swords and acid" . . . the word "spur's" does not sound right to me . . . I would remove the apostrophe (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


This is epic, powerful and sadly so true. A lot of relationships turn sour when you find your lover turns out not to be who you thought they were.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Bertha

5 Months Ago

But isn't it at times we allow ourselves be cheated?
Dawn

5 Months Ago

i guess so, we think we are not worth love and true affection, so hate ourselfs.
Bertha

5 Months Ago

Yes. We belittle ourselves
This is powerful! You seem so sure. so confident in yourself. Good for you.
It is so easy to read the anguish you feel at the betrayal of what you thought was true of him only to find him so different.

Take care - Dave

Posted 5 Months Ago


Bertha

5 Months Ago

It really can be breaking how you felt everything to be perfect but you find out to be so different... read more
This is such a powerful little write, nicely expressed

Posted 5 Months Ago


Bertha

5 Months Ago

Thank you Rye. Thanks for sparing your time to read this.
Wow! This is gripping, I enjoyed this write, Shows someone who takes no crap

Posted 5 Months Ago



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Bertha
Bertha

Blantyre, Limbe, Malawi



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