The Fall of Summer

The time of year when Summer gives way to Fall...

Foliage falling

 nature's calling

 Summer's closed her eyes.

 Tears streaming

 power's weaning

 Summer prepares goodbyes.

 

Gaining power

every hour

Fall rises from his sleep.

Never aging

forever waging

Both Fall and Summer weep.

 

Ever desiring

time transpiring

Summer can't hold onto Fall.

Tender lust

unspoken trust

passing moments enthrall.

Author's Note

Still in rough form.

(Credit to the photographer)

Reviews

[Crow]

I liked it also! Made me think about how much I am ready for a change of season, thank you for revealing a small piece of you.

[David W Moore III]

It is a great piece. The rhyme scheme supports it well. And the romance between the seasons - sublime!

[SilentDreamer]

Love it! Great peice of writing in so many ways.

[Justin Tobey]

Great personification of the passing of one season and the renewal of another.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on this wonderful winning poem!

[Periac]

Love dying

terror prying

their love not meant to be.

Hushed good byes

sincere sighs

to this they did agree.

bit dark in a warm way...hard to place the feeling but thats why i love it

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This is a surprise type poem you start with nature then subtlely personafiy the departing season and the new one replacing it. This is IMHO top-notch poetry thanks for sharing!

[E. A. Fielder]

I love it! I think the line that really opened up the imagry in my mind the most was "both fal and summer weep." I wouldn't call it a work in progress it seems finished to me. I love the picture you picked for it as well.

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Well even as a work in progress this paints a nice picture of the changing season I will wait impaciently for the final version