Angel Tears

For a contest.

I hear her
in my dreams
her angel voice
as she sings
her angel tears
fall on me
lying here in bed
late at night
wishing I were dead
sickness eating at me
giving me unending pain
I hear her
my angel beside me
comforting me
crying weeping
over me
I drift off to sleep
feeling at peace
as healing
washes through me
She came to me
She has stayed with me
my angel
saving me

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

a blanket of warm protection,a reverent interlaced finger prayer, the brush of absence painting away the pains piercing ,a covey of care bears to give you light. angels tears some one is listing , listening... Amen

[Coyote Song]

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[Black Cat Fever]

Anyone who offers such comfort in the time of pain and sickness are angels. Lovely and inspiring write!

[Coyote Song]

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[Tina Kline]

Nicely done. Angels can be comforting in times of fear and sorrow. A very beautiful and wonderful poem.

[Coyote Song]

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[Eric Cox]

Beautiful. I enjoyed your penning upon this poem of a loving guardian angel. Nicely done.

[Coyote Song]

Thanks Eric!

[Eric Cox]

you're welcome :)

[DIVYA]

We all have our Gaurdian Angels. She must be very beautiful to envision...
We must be grateful for these beautiful angels.

Amazing write...

[Coyote Song]

Thanks!

[Trigorin]

You have a decent concept here, but I really don't like the sort of chant-like quality your poem takes on after the first couple lines. I think there's a lot of merit in a sort of appeal to a higher being, but the way you present it here is frankly too old-fashioned for the other content. You could save it by tweaking the setting a little and throwing in some references that would make that sort of writing style work out, but I feel like that would detract from your concept somewhat. I do really like your idea with this and I think you're on the right track, but I really wouldn't have done it this way.