Many Nights

This is a poem about the love that I still have for my ex-boyfriend that I dated for about one year and three months.

Many nights I lie awake

Many nights I think

Many nights he haunts my dreams

Many nights I hate

Many nights he seems to wait

For my protective wall to break

Many nights that I recall

Every moment that we shared

Some moments I love so much

While others I would die to forget

Yet somehow in my heart

The moments that I love

Rise above every single last moment

That I would give my life to forget

Now it hurts so much

To see his face

Or even hear his voice

And horrible things he says to me

Stab a stake right through my heart

Yet somehow…

I still love him.

 

Reviews

[Greystone]

Hmmmm. I like this. It's prose, I'm assuming, so we don't have to worry so ardently *Ahem* about weather or not to have a rhyme scheme. The strategic repetition of the 'Many Nights' facade is downright essential to this piece's message---I've been through this. I hope all goes well for you in future ventures.

Keep Writing.

[poetic soul]

yet somehow, anyhow, by all means, we all always end up loving "him" even after having so many sleepless, haunting nights! its always best to forget and move on.....nice piece of work out there....liked it!

:) Smiles,
Poetic Soul

[HamonoAkira]

This poem is very raw. Like a love letter written straight from the heart. Very honest and straight. I hear a sad song in my mind while I read this piece. It tells me, in so few words, how these "many nights" become either a nightmare or a sweet dream.

-Arnie :3

[Beatrice Boyle (Grandm..]

This was lovely Rosalie...selfless love is the best kind.

If you hold a butterfly in your hand too tightly, it will die. If you loosen your hand and let it go, it will fly away. If it was meant to be, he will fly back to you!

Thank you for selecting my "Final Journey" for your collection.

Beatrice Boyle (Grandma Bea)

[poet2angels (lynda)]

What a powerful ending...wow
Much emotion here
TY for entering!

Lynda

[Kris]

Firstly, I think you need to decide whether you want a rhyme scheme or not. You flirt with a rhyme scheme but it's never fully realized. Once you've decided yae or nae on the rhyme scheme, you should consider reworking this poem from the ground up. As it is, it comes across as though I'm reading a segment of a breakup letter or a diary. It also comes across as extremely melodramatic. I'm also not certain what you intended by the stake in the heart line. Are you implying you're some sort of vampire? Anyway, if your intention is simply to vent some emotions, by all means keep it as is. If your intention, however, is to write a meaningful, thoughtful, memorable poem then you should really think about what you want to say with this piece.

Cheers.