Cyborg

Just something I wrote for a contest... I think if Robocop could write poetry, this is what he would write!

I am a cyborg. I remember.
Half machine, half human.
Cables running through my veins
Allow systemic consonance.
Everything new functions better.
Yet I am not superhuman
As my presence mustn’t be an annoyance.

I am a cyborg. I remember.
Half machine, half mortal.
I don’t feel cold nor hot.
I can’t sense the wind or the rain.
My sense of touch is encumbered
I am by no means normal
Memories is all I got
As I no longer feel the pain.

I am a cyborg. I remember.
Half machine, half a person.
I need my frequent maintenance
Lubrication, fluids and systems checks
I don’t want to be dismembered
Or my condition to be worsened
I am the product of bioscience
Technology’s very latest.

I am a cyborg. I remember.
Half machine, half man.
I have no family or friends
No hobbies, possessions or pets.
My existence is quite somber.
No hate, love or illusion
My mind in complete restraint.
Memories is all I possess.

I am a cyborg.
Half machine, half somebody.
I remember.

Reviews

[Mercia74]

This is great, right up my street. I'm not brave enough to write like you, I find rhyming helps me lead into things, I guess I kinda hide behind the rhythm, if you know what I mean. Love the tone of this, unusual topic and I feel that I have begun to find others who share a passion for the odd. Love it!

[Al R. Arce]

My dear new friend... Writing is not about bravery, nor trying to master techniques or imitating patterns. Writing is about YOU. At first you'll do it because you want to. You just have something to say. But then a magical moment will come, in which it is not you who is doing the writing, but something else. I call it the Muse (how original!). It will lift you from your feet and take you where you never thought you'd go. It will write itself and you'll become it's instrument, not it's master. Don't lock yourself into one corner also. Explore other topics. Push yourself outside your comfort zone. It will allow you to explore things about yourself you did not know existed. Then, apply the lessons learned into your topic of passion. After all how do you define odd if you don't explore what others find normal! Thank you for your review!

[Mercia74]

lovely comments, thank you. And I know what you mean, sometimes I write things then stop and look back at it and it doesn't feel like it was me, if you know what I mean (I'm sure you do). Thanks again for your thought provoking reply, it means a lot :)

[Al R. Arce]

2nd place spot on ScyFy Corner poetry contest...

[Strider Marcus Jones]

Is this a cyborg..or all that remains of what once made us human. Excellent poem that provokes thought about how modern life alienates us from ourself and each other. 100/100

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I felt I was Arnold Schwarzenegger - the Terminator as I read this work...I could hear his voice saying these lines aloud from stanza to stanza...as a reader...with the way the words are arranged and just has the robotic feel to the whole narrative of this verse...

[Sheila Kline]

You have been able to interject yourself into the human nature of this creation as well as the mechanical and it is fascinating to read through it with the repetition which reminds me of the way a robotic voice would speak - a monotone sans emotion, yet there is memory, and it is the memory that haunts the cyborg. I end the poem with a feeling of sadness for it. I wonder if this shall ever come to be.

You have certainly given me something to think about! I ponder what will happen to our socioeconomic structure and if we shall be cast off as humans of value vs. the worth of that which we shall need in terms of dollars and care, and have even speculated and believe AI will evolve to the point of reality. But, again oh how lonely this creation you speak of is!!