If

One line poem for the contest

If that old lame dog stops howling I will stop rocking my wheelchair.

Author's Note

I never tried to write a one line poem, it is made instantly for the contest.

Reviews

[New Dawn]

yeah I really liked this, conjured up a great if odd image. didn't try too hard or try to cram in too much information - which is why I have voted for this as my favourite.

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

A part of it is inspired by my environment. I have a pack of street dogs below my windows. I have lived here for 6 years. One of them is very old and has two lame legs. Another one lost only one leg. Both are alive and sometimes howl at night. And they continued running after cars.
Thanks for your comment and vote. This time I needed to explain a little, although I know that short poems can lose their charm by explaining.

[New Dawn]

Well i think you captured the atmosphere beautifully

[Archia]

I like the charcaterisation that comes through in this character, a lot can be said just by this one line. Great work.