The Corners Fruitless Woes

We look down on creativity and two of a kind

We criticize, berate and whine

Who do you think you are?

The whimsical manic fairy girl at the bar

Here to whisk my troubles away?

"No actually I wanted to say"

You're not that special

That's just something you're taught

"Ow wow, never had that thought

Sarcasm, do you know her?"
Lovely little thing with a chip on her shoulder

Passive, aggressive, with a sting

Formed by a pull on the heart strings

I never considered harps to be so god awful 

Until these wasted chronicles

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[ididnot]

yeah cool keep going write more

[Cruz Niq]

Thankyou XD

[BAlanMorgan]

I think this was well written. I found that wondering who was berating you seemed to be the audience. I felt a definite frustration from the writer, which is good--raw emotion is important. The harp comment is pretty impactful, and the "something you're just taught" still rings in my ear. Good stuff. Maybe a little more separation in the quotations could help, cause for the first second I was lost as to who was speaking--however, I re read it and found that it worked well. The first instance could cause confusion to those that might not necessarily know what you're using the quotations for, however after I re read and re read, I found that I enjoyed it more each time I did. I like that intro line a lot, since it's true, more because humanity looks down on anything at all--and you point that out as creativity, or the representation of uniqueness, etc. and two of a kind--which is the commercialism and repetition the world already sees, so this works well. In conclusion, I found you had a lot of good elements in the poem, and i'm glad to have read it, so I look forward to reading more and more and better and better and better work that I know for certain will stem from your hands. Good stuff overall. Yeah I really like the ending a lot--haha I just re read those last four lines like 10 times :D

[Cruz Niq]

Originally I'd written this on my phone without any punctuation at all. I realized that the poem may be even more confusing without punctuation so I added some where it seemed necessary. So I totally understand that it's offbeat, I was waiting for someone to call me out on it XD
I'm glad my sentiments in the first lines are some what shared.
Your praise is almost too much, my friend, but thankyou! Very and very and very much.