Pen With No Ink

Pen With No Ink

A Poem by CudiKid
"

i was feeling a little sad

"
I feel dead
sometimes i dream of having nightmares
one day i live
soon i will love
soon is a long time to wait
i wonder if i will live
sometimes i dream of having kids
maybe i am just a little to young
i wonder when will i die or will anyone cry
i runaway but i am very slow
and then i empty out you wont see me 
not even a glow.


© 2011 CudiKid



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CudiKid

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Some pertinent questions. Most of which are predominently influenced by you. You might want to do some work on the flow of this poem. The second line was not immediately obvious to me. I think I might have got it first time, if you added a comma to line three and brought line four up to meet it. Others may disagree though.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Soon is very far away, that I agree with completely. So many of these things bounce against the corners of our minds and never find any relevant answers. I, like you, so many times fantasized on running away. But living in a nomadic state isn't always easy though, is it? (btw from your user name I'd assume you are a fan of Kid Cudi? I am toooo!)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Some pertinent questions. Most of which are predominently influenced by you. You might want to do some work on the flow of this poem. The second line was not immediately obvious to me. I think I might have got it first time, if you added a comma to line three and brought line four up to meet it. Others may disagree though.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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