I Broke My Locket Today

I Broke My Locket Today

A Poem by sHiLoH
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A short little poem I wrote a few years ago. The locket is supposed to represent a heart.

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I broke my locket today,
and you weren't there to fix it.
 

I thought back to all those times before,
when you where always there,
waiting, calmly, to fix it as good as new.
No matter what I had done.


I broke my locket today,
and you weren't there to fix it.


They came and told me today,
told me what had happened.
They said you where doing what you do best,
you where fixing lockets.
But there was a problem with your locket.
A problem that nobody knew about.

 
I broke my locket today,
and you weren't there to fix it.


They said your locket shattered,
in all its wonderus glory of age, it couldn't hold up.
They said you where gone before they knew,
before they knew what had happened.

I broke my locket today,
and you weren't there to fix it.

 
Won't you come back and fix it one last time?

© 2010 sHiLoH



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Wow. creative use of symbolisim. i was a little confused...but that's ok. I liked it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


nice..
effective repetition..
well written..
good work..

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Posted 7 Years Ago


I LOVE this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cute.
I think the repetition is effective.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nice poem. Keep up the good work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nice symbolism. Also, I like the way the narrator implores in the last line..."Won't you come back and fix it one last time?" Well done.

Patrick



Posted 7 Years Ago


wow, very deep and meaningful, great write!!!:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


I hope it doesn't offend you, but there's something precious about this poem.


Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on February 8, 2010
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Tags: locket, heartbreak, death, mourning, loss, comfort

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