Defining Perfection

Sometimes we expect that we'll get the the fairy-tale princess ending, but love comes in many forms, and is expressed in many different ways.

Perfection comes from not the polished look,
Nor words, nor actions from a fairy tale;
Those timeless rhymes, ideals from which we took,
And dreamed perfection from a fiction's sale.
Though unattainable it all may seem,
One masters that, perfection in its style,
But not commercial, fake, or phantom dream,
But real - unlike those all who fake the while.
And yet, you cannot see yourself in truth,
And I imagined not this shock of turn,
Though now I find myself so close to you,
I couldn't tear away, Love, if it burned.
And though you lie, a human, 'neath the skies,
A soul who's perfect human in my eyes.

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

Wr need not have a perfect person,but a perfect relationship. Yes we do crave for fairy tale endings but in real life it isn't possible. Liked the use of word commercial- perfectly portrays how we become selfish looking fod someone perfect. nice write :)

~Sophy

[Mazie]

Thank you very much ^^ and it's true, we get lost in ideals sometimes, that we forget what good is right in front of us.. thanks for reviewing and commenting and for your kind words ^^

[jennifer little]

i enjoyed reading this poem thanks for putting it in the competition ill post reviews on who is the winners as soon as the contest ends good luck to you... i really loved your poem

[Mazie]

thank you ^_^

[Rick Puetter]

Dear CraziWriter,

This is nice. Nice rhythm and rhyme. Also some nice turn of phrase.

Quite enjoyed.

Best regards,

Rick

[Mazie]

thank you so much Rick, I am sorry I missed your review! Thank you for taking the time to read :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"And though you lie, a human, 'neath the skies,
A soul who's perfect human in my eyes"
The poem told the truth. Perfection is in the eyes of the beholder. You led the reader to a perfect closure. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mazie]

thank you again for reviewing and taking the time to really understand my writing ^^ I appreciate your kind words :)

[Blogger]

This is awesome. Comparing a loved one to old fairy tales with their meanings is ambitious. You accomplished this too. Few lines here complete your goal.

[Mazie]

thank you :D I'm glad ^^

[Mary Bosworth]

very nice piece of writing

[Mazie]

Thank you very much, and for taking the time to read :)

[RAOrourke]

A soul who's perfect human in my eyes...very nice images and emotions come to mind when reading your work. Nice job!

[Mazie]

Thank you very much ^^

[Wórdsmíth]

Quiet impressive to read! Yeah .. nothing happens in the end what we do sometimes expect from life ... cos, it`s all what the life wants us to have .. keep in the heart for long because sometimes, our decisions themselves take us down to the edges of life from where it`s very hard to come back so, yeah..it`s must ... love`s must to know the taste of pain and the joy of life. Nice flow of ink! ;)

[Mazie]

Thank you for your positive feedback and for taking the time to read ^^ and I agree, about love needing to experience both pain and joy :)

[Tom]

Yes indeed love is blind !

A passion write, penned in pleasing old world romantic form!

[Mazie]

Thank you for taking the time to read ^^ I do love the old-fashioned writing, and especially Shakespearean sonnets

[Tom]

Me too, they''re so romantic and genuinely penned with the old ink quill !