Treasure

A true story of my thoughts a few years after my mother's death, put in terms of what you should treasure.

Reviews

[Angela H.]

Chelsea,

This story breaks my heart. And because it is the only thing you have posted so far, I get the feeling that it is still fresh? If not in actual time, certainly in the non-time of the heart. You capture the immediacy and the vulnerability of the story beautifully, and your choise of present tense helps to bring the reader right into the heart of it.

Keep writing.

[Zephyr]

the only imperfect thing i noticed was that in the paragraph that begins with the line "The room, so noisy before." had a spelling/grammatical error. The sixth line of the paragrapth is written as "you have too." but technically should be written as "you have to" so far as i know. or i might be wrong and be making myself look like a nitpicking idiot.

in any case, excellent work with this. it's beautiful in so many ways.