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Lawn King

Lawn King

A Poem by D Connolly
"

Lizards. Just lizards.

"

His throat puffs up as red as a brick

He sits like a king on top of a stick

He pushes his speckled chest up and down

Challenging all for a chance at the crown

They race and he braces himself for a fight

The girls hurry and scurry in flirtish delight

The battle ensues, and mercy is nil

Jaws lock and they twist in the effort to kill

Victory now, the King reigns on his throne

He decides that he won't be ruling alone

Sweet maiden who hides in bromeliad green

Sees her chance to become the true queen

When come to his side, their tails intertwine

And the rest of the kingdom politely resigns

As the moon wanders out and the night softly falls

The air is filled with their loving calls



© 2016 D Connolly



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'Lawn King'
D.Connolly,
The wild kingdom is seen in the miniature as you weave this captivating tale of the lizard who would be king and he even will have his queen. How cute is that!? So here he is willing to battle for his crown in a physical duel. It feels like a old time story and all he needs is a sword. You played off of the natural world of nature and gave it a winsome twist with the classic feel of a medieval tale. Thanks for this. It was intriguing and inspiring.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 2 Days Ago


An unusual poem about a lizard, but either way, a descriptive piece.

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

Thank-you for visiting :)
Ah, I so love gardens and all the life that thrives there. Can sense this one, see it moving and breathing and calling the world to its dance. For me seeing a lizard in the garden is a divine gift and the song sweet magic. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


An owl on the moon

1 Year Ago

Haha! They're definitely all sleeping here with the cold... or maybe they migrated your way! :)
D Connolly

1 Year Ago

Yeah... we don't get cold here, unless you count the 1 day a year I get to pull out the fuzzy jacket.. read more
An owl on the moon

1 Year Ago

Now that's my kind of world! Keep warm and wonderful down there!
I must commend you on sticking to your rhyme scheme the entire way through. I don't see that often, sadly.

The imagery in this piece is visceral and focused, which is akin to a refreshing bucket of water being dumped on my head. Your abandoning of metaphors for the real and the concrete is so, so lovely.

My favorite lines:

"The battle ensues, and mercy is nil"

^So well crafted. 'Nil' is an underused word at best, and you manage to showcase it in all its glory.

"Sweet maiden who hides in bromeliad green"

^I encounter so few direct references to flowers even in the most sugary prose. It really brings home the appreciation for such subtle adornments of our everyday lives.

Brava! You've done a wonderful job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

Thank-you for this wonderful review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this and appreciated it :)
I am no fan of lizards but this poem is very sweetly written.
I like the rhyme and the story that you have created with your words.

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

Thank-you for shoving your dislike of lizards aside to enjoy the poem! ;)
PatC

1 Year Ago

You have a real talent with poetry and I liked the easy flow of the poem. Great Job!
I thought it was simple and loved every line that painted the picture of a lizard as a king. It held throughout the whole poem and the rhythm gave it a sweet vibe to it that made me smile.

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

thank-you very much :)
amazingly written keep it up :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

thank-you :)
Urja Gokani

1 Year Ago

welcome :)
Melodic & drama-filled journey from fighting for love supremacy to settling into his earned throne with nearby loving queen. I love the personification of this lizard tale while also retaining most of the lizardness of each interaction. Excellent word crafting to convey the visual aspects of this epic experience! *smile* Great rhyme & rhythm, too!

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

thank-you so much!!
D. Connolly this is effortless very nice write! I love the rhyming, structure and the story of this poetry. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

thank-you! I'm so glad people think its effortless (you guys don't get to see all of my revisions LO.. read more
YanZeros

1 Year Ago

that's true, that just shows how magnificent this poem is! you're welcome!
You say, "Lizards, just lizards", yet they are quite impressive! I enjoyed the flow, and explanation in your write; so clear that I can just see that lizard "gone 'a courtin', uh huh, he did go"-oh wait, that was a froggie....LOL
The guys really have to put up quite a fight for us gals and it "ain't" always a pretty fight, unless they are after a praying mantis, or another female who eats her mate! YIKES, better to be a lizard!

Posted 1 Year Ago


D Connolly

1 Year Ago

HAHA, thank-you for making me laugh Sheila, it's been a morning over here... I needed it. :)

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