Cactus In My Pudding

Cactus In My Pudding

A Poem by D. Connolly
"

A bud fell off of my cactus into my pudding, waking me up from a lunchtime snooze

"

As I sat staring at a blinking screen

And blurbs started to blur and become uncertain

I started to drift into a little dream

Lulled by the smell of garlic hummus

And the beep of the printer in the hallway

But before my eyes shut for good

I heard a thump and noticed that a furry pod from my sulking cactus

Had fallen into my pudding.


© 2016 D. Connolly



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Well, I suppose you do live in a place called Siesta Key, so we can't be surpri...zzzzzzzzzzzz... (head hits keyboard).
Great snippet of sharp observation. Made very sensual by the smell/sound details. I don't think anyone reading this could not smell that garlic and hear that printer.
The finale is fantastic. It's just richly amusing and interesting, a tiny moment of life, with a sensitive human observer there to capture it, and with the inclination to share the moment and the skill to do so. And then final line leaves me wondering...pudding? What sort of pudding?
Your little verse has the idiosyncratic wit and charm of a Gary Larson The Far Side cartoon.

Posted 8 Months Ago


D. Connolly

8 Months Ago

LOL, I guess the laid back atmosphere works against me sometimes, especially at nap time; I mean lun.. read more
R J Askew

8 Months Ago

Maybe the cactus sort of nodded off also. No cause to waste a good puddin'!
Glad you noticed it Dani. You might have ended up with a prickly pear growing inside you.
N.

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

that would have been an awkward conversation with the doctor...
Hmm. Seems like someone was snoozing on the job! I certainly hope the boss doesn't read this!

Sulking cactus....a nice description!

A neat little write.

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Hi Doodles! Yeah, sometimes I snooze a bit on my lunch break LOL! It's healthy! Thank-you :)
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LOL!...(not) Cactus in your pudding eh? That would not be very appetizing me thinks. Cute write! ~Sharon

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

thank-you Miss Sharon :)
This moment in time, this reflection of the drifting place and the spoiled pudding, just comes alive, shared in such a way that we can see the disappointed look on your face. May you find something delicious in your dreams. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Thank-you C :)
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You're honestly such a joy to read D...love this.
Starz x

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Thank-you! Good to see your smiling face on my page :)
If I were to snooze at lunch (back when I worked full time in an office), I would never be able to fully awaken to the joys of work again that day *zzzzzzz* I like your simple down-to-earth poems about real life. Enjoy your cactus sprinkled hummus! *yum!*

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Ha! Thanks Margie, good to see you ((CYBER HUG!))
better to be woken up that way than by your boss i guess. nice write. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Hey! I can nap on my lunch break LOL ;)
one simply can not ignore a cactus just because its demands are few ..better straighten out and fly right D Connolly! ;)
what a delightful little read for me this morning .. it is light on the brain ..like a chiffon suffle' ... but prickly :))))
E.
is the garlic hummus your boss down the hall and around the corner? bruahahahaha!

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

LOL, hi E! Thank-you for the laugh
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

:) ...............
Well I can say with 100% certainty, that this has made my day. It is a dear diary moment I never saw coming, that I would ever read a poem called "Cactus in my pudding." :)
At least you can be thankful you noticed it before you ate it :)



Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Hi Nemo! Thank-you for reading ;)
Lorry.

9 Months Ago

No worries :)

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