Copper Crown

Copper Crown

A Poem by D. Connolly
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I was startled by the beauty of a tree in my neighbor's yard

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Twas trick of yonder setting sun cast gold upon the grounds


The lengthening of shadows made monsters of my hounds


Looking towards the bleeding sky to watch the sun go down


I was romanced into poetry by the copper of your crown


I tried to name the color, but names, they do abound...


A lighter shade than ochre, not quite a sultry brown


More golden than a fallow, camel, or any tawny that I've found


No, there's nothing quite as pretty as the copper of your crown


© 2017 D. Connolly



Author's Note

D. Connolly
I looked up, and the golden sunlight was perfectly highlighting the top of this tree. Who knows if it was a trick of the light, but the color was just startling and beautiful

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Very nicely done I find! The rhyme in every single line. Descriptions strong but still combine. A fuller picture to enshrine. The golden crown at twilight-time. So wondrous pure and sweet sublime. Like droplets glassed on chilled white wine. There really is no other kind!

Sunlight at the start and close of days is so wonderfully intense. Like you, I adore the way it colours the grass and trees. The world feels safer, somehow, more at one. Very nicely done!

BRs
Nigel

Posted 5 Months Ago


D. Connolly

5 Months Ago

Ha! What a great review! Thanks Nigel!
Nature's vibrant hues are indeed inspiring as your finely worded poem vindicates....Wonderfully uplifting!

Posted 6 Months Ago


D. Connolly

6 Months Ago

Hi Tom! Thank-you!
LOVE THIS! What an excursion of word play! I love the extended rhyme of only a single sound, along with the bouncy rhythm that speaks to the fun you're having at that moment. Such great imagination: "monsters of my hounds" . . . "ochre not quite a sultry brown" (love it when poets use a variety of unusual colors) . . . & the title phrase, too. I love the way you stretched this experience out for the reader, so we could savor it with you.

Posted 6 Months Ago


D. Connolly

6 Months Ago

I'm so glad you enjoyed! I've been watching it turn a lovely green over the past several weeks, and.. read more
barleygirl

6 Months Ago

Having an owl to spy over the coming weeks is a special treat! (((HUGS)))
Such fine meter and a wonderful description about your glorious surroundings. Every day outdoors has its own magical tones, whether vibrant or subtle In fact, temperamental Nature is where Life truly is..

' Looking towards the bleeding sky to watch the sun go down ' - thinking over that phrase really paints a mind picture!

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Thank-you Emma! I love sitting in the back yard watching nature unfold. It's really nice, no matter .. read more
Watching a sunset in Florida can be magical. What a lovely nature write. Good rhyming. Lydi**

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Thank-you Lydia
This is short and sweet and right to the point...I hike in the woods a lot in the summers and often get swept away by the beauty of nature. Well done, well written my friend! :) x

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Thanks Kathryn!
you have captured our dilemma perfectly ... we see beauty evrywhere but now how to get it out ..i like this poem a lot because it not only captures the aspirations but the work and struggle writers go though to present something spectacular, spectacular for others to have the same experience ... (i do think you mean caramel not camel in L7;)
i like the overall font and line spacing .. it makes your poem instantly clear and easy flowing ... before even reading ... i take our wonder dog Bella out early in the morning and when the moon is so very bright (as in the snow moons of the last several days) it throws shadows from the trees and moon glow all over the ground .. i do not even begin to attempt to describe it ... but one of these days i may .. very enjoyable read for me Big D!
E.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

ahahaha so funny ..good man says i .. to put up with an artist ;) hard to be a fan of the beauty of .. read more
D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

LOL very funny! :)
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

:) ....................
We have a lime tree whose leaves become brown on top, but white underneath in autumn which
creates a beautiful pattern of contantly changing colour, so I can fully appreciate the effect of your poem.


Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

We don't often get to see a drastic change in the leaves during seasons, but we can see slight chang.. read more
this poem rocks. beautiful & elegant, yet powerful. smooth flow. magical imagery. nature does wear a 'crown' as far as i'm concerned. last line is classic. this just uplifted me. 'nuff said.

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Thank-you Pete
The architects of a nearby housing project created a row of streets here that catch the setting sun and makes the houses literally glow red. It's a beautiful sight but here's nature showing how it's really done!!
Great vivid piece Dani.
:)

Posted 9 Months Ago


D. Connolly

9 Months Ago

Hi Tony! Thank-you :)

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