Absolution

Absolution

A Poem by Drew Harvey

Absolution calls.
To Consume or to be consumed, existence is the struggle to exist.
The only law is decay. Bodies rot, Stars die, memories fade and order crumbles
The only constant is chaos. It's hot fingers rip at the universe, pulling at the loose threads.
To live it to defy cold entropy, stare into the eyes of eternity and say ‘no!’
Absolution calls. Can you hear it?

© 2017 Drew Harvey



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I would like to critique your poem on a few levels.
technical- I am not sure I understand your use of punctuation, what do the periods mean? I feel like "the only law is decay." should stand alone because of the period and yet the next words seem connected. Am I missing something here?
philosophical- the word absolution has religious connotations and yet I get a sense that you have a scientific mind and outlook. Is absolution the word you wanted here. Why would a person caught in a cold and decaying universe need absolution unless they were somehow to blame for the coldness and decay. Perhaps I have misconstrued your outlook.
overall- I like your use of words and your energy and only wonder if you need to take the energy of inspiration and marry it with answering some difficult technical and philosophical questions.

Posted 3 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Drew Harvey

3 Months Ago

Thanks for taking the time to read this! And thanks for your comments!
Paul

3 Months Ago

If you have some time I would appreciate some people with different backgrounds reading and giving f.. read more



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Yes, I think I know what you might be implying by calling the poem Absolution. It is almost as if we are responsible for existence, which I suppose we are in a way, being part of the physical universe. And, because it is so chaosy, we do need to ask for absolution. Hopefully there may be more to Reality, than just the physical.....?

Posted 2 Months Ago


"existence is the struggle to resist"
loved this line. Very beautiful writing.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Only one word needs to be replaced in my opinion. For "absolution " read "survival". We can exploit nature, but we cannot defeat it, So who would absolve whom? As we see from other "world's" destruction, entropy exists. who absolves them?

Posted 2 Months Ago


Zander Fairchild

2 Months Ago

One could argue that mankind's sole purpose is to defeat nature. To weather any storm. To best any p.. read more
I was transported back to my college thermodynamics course for a minute. Interesting weave of religiosity & scientific, sometimes seen as opposing viewpoints. I've always been drawn to the obvious spectacle of chaos & entropy, despite many human's obsession with fighting it. You present these ideas in a fresh & original way. My only drawback was this line (redundant or circular): "existence is the struggle to exist" . . .

Posted 2 Months Ago


Hi Drew, sorry it has taken me ages to respond to your other read requests. I just had to back-track before tackling the stories... I like the dark & abstract undertones of this. Accepting the pointlessness & finality of this life and in a way defying this fact by finding meaning herein, is how I understand it.

Posted 2 Months Ago


I would like to critique your poem on a few levels.
technical- I am not sure I understand your use of punctuation, what do the periods mean? I feel like "the only law is decay." should stand alone because of the period and yet the next words seem connected. Am I missing something here?
philosophical- the word absolution has religious connotations and yet I get a sense that you have a scientific mind and outlook. Is absolution the word you wanted here. Why would a person caught in a cold and decaying universe need absolution unless they were somehow to blame for the coldness and decay. Perhaps I have misconstrued your outlook.
overall- I like your use of words and your energy and only wonder if you need to take the energy of inspiration and marry it with answering some difficult technical and philosophical questions.

Posted 3 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Drew Harvey

3 Months Ago

Thanks for taking the time to read this! And thanks for your comments!
Paul

3 Months Ago

If you have some time I would appreciate some people with different backgrounds reading and giving f.. read more
Logical and true words written.
"The only law is decay. Bodies rot, Stars die, memories fade and order crumbles "
The above lines. Real life. I liked the complete poem and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


This is a profound and starkly portrayed piece Drew. You bring into question existence itself and stimulate thoughts of God, heaven and earth in a flowing and intelligent write.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Living life on a daily basis grants absolution I think. Life, God, doesn't matter the noun. Yes, "cold entropy " not my idea of a good day. I love your energy, your call to the fight! Eloquent with vivid imagery. Well- done!



Posted 4 Months Ago


Seems EVERYTHING we "stare into" stares back anymore.

I don't ask forgiveness for being me - I've earned my nightmares - just as you will likely earn yours.

Posted 4 Months Ago



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