Starving We Spread (Poem)

Starving We Spread (Poem)

A Poem by Damien Davison
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So onward we struggle, as 16 year old kids...

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Starving, we spread
Through unlocked doors we rummage

Dawn is ahead
Fill the pits in our stomachs

Hygiene a low
False confidence a high

Further we go
Self destructing our lives

Pain for the pleasures
Of accomplished failure

We're here for each other
And that we make sure

For freedom costs plenty
In this system we live

So onward we struggle 
As 16 year old kids

© 2012 Damien Davison



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Being homeless is difficult. We learn to appreciate the simple things when we have nothing. Thank you for the powerful poem. The strong statements create a vision of trying to survive and struggle. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

A majority of my time being homeless as a youth was difficult for sure. What made it easier was the .. read more



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the stories of street kids really makes me glad for this roof over my head makes me wish i could save them really well captured in this piece well done

Posted 4 Years Ago


Damien Davison

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, I should sometimes think back and remind myself to be thankful.
NICE

Posted 4 Years Ago


Damien Davison

4 Years Ago

Thank you!
The best thing about your writing it that its not superficial its completely real all those emotions are so well expressed, you have a great talent

Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

Thank you again, it's easier to write it when it is real!
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Ees
Wonderful.
I loved this poem!
I didn't love, (though didn't hate either) the solidity of the last stanza. I just liked it left without putting a specific time-frame on it. But your words were eloquently stated!
The third and fourth stanzas were my very favorite part.
Wonderful work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ees

5 Years Ago

"We're here for each other
And that we make sure"-
was also really great. I have seen th.. read more
Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

Thank you, I felt adding the age of us would add more drama. Kids not even age of majority living th.. read more
Ees

5 Years Ago

I know that there are kids out there homeless. I have never been homeless, but when I was young I ha.. read more
friendships are so much more intense at this bridging age between chilhood and adulthood - our friends are our family and the only ones who understand what we are trying to communicate.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

Yea, that's how I felt at the time. And we all shared a tent and the struggle so it made it that muc.. read more
nice clean flow, and retains image of subject thruout...details and sincerity are good. would make a nice introduction to a longer prose /story...using the same topic and adding dailys for a week and 8th day repeat.. what do you think?


Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

Hmm.... I actually think that is a good idea, mind you I don't really have the time to do one daily .. read more
Larry Dyson

5 Years Ago

a writer like you should have a tape recorder or note pad for every day thinking. just sayin.
Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

Wow, you seriously just made my day. That is about the best thing someone has said to me in a really.. read more
Coming from a good home, I've never been able to understand why kids take to the streets and turn their backs on parents and families. It wasn't part of my universe, though your poem certainly opens doors. Good job,
David.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

I appreciate the review, I plan to make more on the subject, in time. Thank you!
wow, demien, that was a powerful poem. you describe all the feelings so well, and i can understand the importance of the 4 other kids, your pseudo family. actually more of a "make do" family. glad that you survived it...good write..

Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

Thank you, it wasn't without doing some dishonorable things that we made it through. It definitely f.. read more
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KT
Awesome piece, very intense. I like the sort of twist you have at the end, where you reveal the starving ones to be 16 year old kids... Definitely makes one think, which is always good! Keep up the awesome rhyming. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and enjoying my writing. Heh, didn't even seem that crazy back then. But now I.. read more
KT

5 Years Ago

No problemo! And that's okay; I don't mind rambling. :)
This was a very powerful piece. Reading this, I think you'd really connect with two of my own poems specifically. One is called I'm Okay, the other is called Concrete Cave. Both of them are about being homeless at a young age. I really felt a connection to this poem, and you do well at describing the emotions that go along with this kind of thing. Very well pieced together. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Davison

5 Years Ago

I`ll be sure to check those pieces out, thank you for the review. I figured I`d reach some people, t.. read more
MachinaWriter

5 Years Ago

True. Very true.

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