I'm Not Your Rag-doll!

I'm not your little lark,
or your cute little squirrel,
I'm your wife...
I'm not a rag-doll!

You can't dress me up,
and change me
to fit into your
made-up life style

I'm a mother,
a wife,
and a woman,

I'm not meant to be paraded
around at parties,
but to be there for you,
only you never give me the time of day,
because your so wrapped up in
keeping an image...

Yes I know I've made mistakes,
but I own up to them...

You're my husband,
you're suppose to be
my knight in shining armor
you're supposed to protect me
in my time of need,
but you're never around...

Reviews

[Revolutionary]

Very strong .I see a mother in the kitchen with a frying pan.he has her self indulged husband backed up against the washer and he is about to piss his new armoni buisness suit cause he isn't sure what she put in the coffee he just drank,and he isn't feeling to well....I'm getting carried away.

[Sukriti Suki]

Direct and to the point. Sometimes thats all we need! good job.

[empty]

strong emotional write

[Brittni]

I noticed that quite a bit of your work does center around the same topic(female beauty/empowerment,etc), but you never exhaust it because you find creative ways to symbolize it. Yet again, always a joy to read your work.

[Cody McGeary]

I like it. Very good. When I was a teenager my family was always trying to change the way I liked to dress, especially my grandmother, so I can relate in a way to this. Nicely done.

[Collette Paige]

Again, a very good and meaningful poem but at many times it does not seem to flow. You really should work on that ^_^

Using "wife" twice kind of close to each other made it seem like you could not think of any more words. This, I know, is not true so please try and flow better :)
the meaning is wonderful and I hope you tak my critique to heart.

~critique because I love~

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

intense and well written

[just take a breath]

i loved how this stated that you are a strong woman who doesnt need someone whos going to treat her that way :)

raggedy ann

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I loved the opening stanza. Cool metaphor.

[Audrey Howitt]

Strong poem and assertive. Like it a lot. I agree about "suppose" and "supposed"--great job!

[myEnigma]

"You can't dress me up,
and change me
to fit into your
made-up life style"
Nice
A strong poem with forwarded emotions, it was also enjoyable to read.