The Edge

I'm on the edge

with you

hanging on by a thread

trying to keep what we had..

I'm slipping..

catch me..

hold me..

I don't want to loose you

we're about to fall

I hate being on the edge

with you

because you let us fall apart

Author's Note

I hope you like it.

Reviews

[kymee]

nice poem. I've been on the edge too and that is quite uncomfortable.Did you both let it fall apart?you were doing all the work in the beginning of the poem. your choice was to get out or get off instead you both let it go. Could be expanded a bit, but necessary, thanks for letting me read your poem and stay off that edge

[Airila]

I do like it. I like it a lot. It describes what I'm feeling.

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Beautiful poem, really great job!

[Kiari Sabon]

nice

[kaylynnmelody♥]

awesome! i love it!

[alternative_be]

Reading your poem, it's like I can see you both dangling from a cliff like in a dramatic movie... Very nice indeed, do stay away from cliffs though, I want to read more of your work!

[Kathryn]

Odd mental image here of a balance lock over Striding edge, but that's just me. Great flow, and a really excellent poem. Wel done :)

You should expand this, perhaps into a short story. There is so much to this piece which has been left to the readers imagination. I think we all know that edge, have experienced it in some way or another. Well done with this, and thanks for sharing.

[akapr17other]

Sad :( but definately a great poem. I especially liked the ending starting from "I don't want to lose you..." It was really good :)

[Babieegirl]

okay this is going in my favorites, like really. I can relate to this so much, it's just... ugh

[Aidz]

short n simple I like it :)