Your Words

Your Words

A Poem by Dani California

 

 

 

 

Your words

 

Ageless 

Faceless

Captivate me

Entrance me

Imprison my mind

Steal my heart

Hidden meanings

Not really there

Hearing thoughts

Never said

Notions of love

Undefined

Space and time 

Are you really there?

I often wonder

And yet still

I find myself

Addicted

Wanting

Seeking

Craving

Needing

Reading

More of 

 

Your words

© 2008 Dani California


Author's Note

Dani California
Random thought...

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random as these words spill to intirgue
the minds, and so wonderfully mastered


Are you really there?

I often wonder

And yet still

I find myself

Addicted

Wanting

Seeking

Needing

Reading more of



Your words

...excellent piece that just

undefined space and time

altogether, creating a wonderful poem!!
as always charmed by your touch!!

Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Nice...

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the colour coding really does something for this poem...can't explain it though :(
this is a lovely succinct piece but the impact is still received in totality. love the technique you've used...its one i haven't seen in a while. refreshing. thanks for sharing...

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Again my friend, nicely put. Simple and direct, truthfull and with heart. Nice:)

Love
Me

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed reading this, though not perhaps in the same manner as some of the other reviewers. If you remove the notions of love, and go with the words - there hidden meanings - how they might twist this and twist that - the subtle subcontext of it all... yes, the mind candy. :) This was great, Dani - thanks.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh this was awesome! I just like the way the poems flows. The ending actually gave me a chill from the part 'I find myself' and all the way down was just great and ending with 'your words'. This a new favorite. A good read. I thank you for writing this.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great structure and flow of verse - that was my thoughts on the first read through. When I read it again, my mind was stimulated into thinking; this is a person seeking spiritual enlightenment. Well, that was my interpretation of the word play.

Creative and fascinating write!

Phill(ozofee)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow thats all i can say wowow

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Hidden meanings not really there hearing thoughts never said"
This is pure genius!
I love the way every word effortlessly carried the thought, how the imagery painted clear pictures, and also how the descriptiveness gave a "random thought" personality...
This is now a favorite of mine.
-Marv


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow. I really like the poem. :) Especially the beginning. It's really nice.
and i love the ending, great ending.
:) wonderful poem. ^^

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Random or not this was simply brilliant! These thoughts just flowed perfectly as our eyes glides down your words as we experience with you those emotions which he stirs deep inside of you!

Great work!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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