Unveiling

Unveiling

A Poem by Dani California

 

Secrets talk amongst themselves

Keeping me suspended,

Longing to hold you

In the dark.  

 

Do you sense my shadow

Behind your eyes,

Begging you to see

What I feel?  

 

I whisper to your mind

Come to me,

Hoping you will hear

Where to turn.  

 

Unknowingly, you search for me

While I wait,

My heart beats faster

Watching you crave.  

 

Hidden under your skin

I stay warm,  

Your pulse exciting me

As secrets unveil.


© 2008 Dani California



Author's Note

Dani California
This is one of those... 'out of nowhere' writes. Not sure... hmm.

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This poem, for some odd reason, messes with me. Perhaps it is the song that I am listening to right now as well, it is definitely the wrong song to be listening to while I read this...lol. This has that dreamy feel to it, not one of those little dream writes that we see here, but a sincere dreamy feel to it. There is an ethereal substance to it, that tugs in the dark - pulling - with softest unspoken whispers. This is truly an amazing piece, Dani... definitely going in the favs (I know that sounds so cliche, but I do not say it lightly)...

Posted 9 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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I just freakin' spent like 30 minutes trying to find something worth reading...and this...was great.....thanks for posting.....'made my night :) Congrats on being a genius! :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice :) It's somewhat of a short poem, but much was expressed.
"Do you sense my shadow
Behind your eyes,
Begging you to see
What I feel?"
I love this part...Excellent, excellent. :)
I can't wait to read more of your writing! =)
~Lauren

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very seductuve and sexy. Sometimes those out of nowhere writes are the best!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Out of nowhere?! I think it's out of a brilliant mind! This is such a clever play with the "usual", each stanza leaves the mind in wonder.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What do you mean out of nowhere. It's a right here poem. Good job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can't believe I never commented on this. I .....

Good write.

Write on.

- J

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I find this Reality one of my fondest; with the Realization of a connection through love, and passion. Even lust brings me to the darkest of corners, lovingly; in this piece. I have wandered around a heart; imagined a whole life in each moment; felt him breathe through my veins, and counted myself as a part of his existence. Just like this piece, where you have reminded me of my greatest of moments and experiences - I have been there, and I feel it still on my own.

I love this gift of bringing a reader through the fountain of memories; the push and probe; the connection. And as so many others of your wordings, Dani - this seems to be your deepest gift of touch. I love it, and admire it.

Thank you sincerely for this fantastic perception of a sharing observation. Perfect!

*hugs*

Skye

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hm...I really like this piece. It kind of makes you wonder. I had to read it a few times to even have a clue as to what it is about. Very nicely written!


Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Another great poem.

Hidden under your skin
I stay warm,
Your pulse exciting me
As you unveil.

Really liked what this says.

Art

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

very interesting piece ... kind of had a creepy dream like feel to it but very well done .... imagery was strong in this piece and flow was good too... fav lines..................Secrets talk amongst themselves

Keeping me suspended,

Longing to hold you

In the dark.



Do you sense my shadow

Behind your eyes,

Begging you to see

What I feel?
............................................ nice job on this one...


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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