Unveiling

 

Secrets talk amongst themselves

Keeping me suspended,

Longing to hold you

In the dark.  

 

Do you sense my shadow

Behind your eyes,

Begging you to see

What I feel?  

 

I whisper to your mind

Come to me,

Hoping you will hear

Where to turn.  

 

Unknowingly, you search for me

While I wait,

My heart beats faster

Watching you crave.  

 

Hidden under your skin

I stay warm,  

Your pulse exciting me

As secrets unveil.

Author's Note

This is one of those... 'out of nowhere' writes. Not sure... hmm.

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

This poem, for some odd reason, messes with me. Perhaps it is the song that I am listening to right now as well, it is definitely the wrong song to be listening to while I read this...lol. This has that dreamy feel to it, not one of those little dream writes that we see here, but a sincere dreamy feel to it. There is an ethereal substance to it, that tugs in the dark - pulling - with softest unspoken whispers. This is truly an amazing piece, Dani... definitely going in the favs (I know that sounds so cliche, but I do not say it lightly)...

[Haley Smith]

I really like this writing. It's dark (in a good way) and I sense a sexual tone coming off of it when I read it, which never hurts haha. It's sparse, but it makes the reader really have to think. That's what happened to me. It's a hooking poem. Hooks you in from the moment you begin to read it and I love this!

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

You had me at the first line...
I think the imagery and the way this poem moved was simply genius, I also like the dark feel it had.
I admire your artistry and I will read anything you write!
Excellent write!

-Marvin Lewis

[Lady Lazarus.]

Your pulse exciting me
As you unveil=

[Mel Stevens]

I like it. It not a 'down to earth' piece, but like the others said, a more etheral poem. Good job, as always.

[UpComesDown]

awwwww..... i really liked it

[Heretic]

This is very good. I really enjoyed it. The first line is my favorite, for some reason. "Secrets talk amongst themselves". That's just an awesome line. Nicely written.

[D. Nelson]

This is a great piece dani. It really conveys the wanting feelings and emotion. I had to read it a few times over to really take it all in and i think the second stanz is my favorite. Great write.

[Aspiring Angel]

It is so strange how things will come to us out of the blue and begs to come to blank posting page. This one just wanted to speak and it has. Very enjoyable.

Blessings,
Lesa

[Gandré]

Hidden under your skin

I stay warm,

Your pulse exciting me

As you unveil.
-------------this was really great ending and a wonderfully romantic poem.. the positive message allows me to feel save... and it is even changing moods... what a wonderful composition. hmm hidden under your skin.. this is utterly trustful.

[Conner G]

Interesting, has a strange feel. Plus a little creepy. I enjoyed.