Reprise

This heart so perfect, the heart not failing,

is somehow still amidst derailing.

I cannot tell you, I cannot say,

I cannot ask you to care today.

This heart so hateful, I am disgraced as such.

I deserve to bleed out all of this blood.

I find it hard to tell, as I cannot breathe,

these nightmares consume all of my dreams.

This heart so light, put a bullet through it.

Aim it straight at me, and please don’t miss.

I look fine, but on the inside I’m dying,

you wouldn’t know because my face keeps lying.

This heart is mine; that, I cannot believe.

I now should not deserve to breathe.

I cannot find destiny, it still eludes,

I have let only my ends ensue.

This heart, such shame, is all that I have.

Please, take me away to a faraway land.

I cannot stay, for I will stop my breathe,

for my time is up…there is no reprise.

Reviews

[State of Grace]

absolutely beautiful!

[Ravyne Hawke]

Heartbreaking, but beautifully written. Love the imagery and flow. Great job!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. Remind me of the great writers of the past. Using strong statements to allow the reader to think. So many lines stood out in this poem.
"This heart so hateful, I am disgraced as such.
I deserve to bleed out all of this blood.'
Your words were strong and you create good visions with excellent description. A very good ending to a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Tony Williams]

great articulation of the 'innocence gone astray' theme where the growing chasm between reality and perspective begins to dominate the subject. It's an awkward thing to express and i believe you've done marvelously (which is a trend I've noticed). Particularly, the paradox of an egocentric supplication for removal. It deserves a shelving.

[Lily Mae]

It's very strange but I could just envision walking up to this person and placing my hand on their heart center, and just holding that energy for awhile... helping the heart and the breath. You obviously have done well...if I felt like I was inside your poem lol.. :) Great write..x

[HopelesslyDevoted]

beautifully put my friend

[MR_BERG]

My heart loves so much I can't stand it. Heartbreaking.(no pun intended)

[sarah]

this is a really great poem!