Malice

Malice

A Poem by Danie
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We all need those relationships so we can learn from our mistakes

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You tried to break her down into minuscule paper fragments,
And it worked,
For a while.
You pretended you did not know what you were doing,
But you knew.
Who are you?
No talent she had,
No breakage from sad,
No empathy to her,
Only cruel words to slur.
You owned her for such a while,
Although not with love,
Instead, with melancholy.
You grazed her heart with your cruel malice tongue, without any desire to stop the bleeding.
But the depressed angel, you once remarked with ignorance,
Has now ascended higher and stronger through the trees,
Than you ever imagined.

© 2017 Danie



Author's Note

Danie
A very personal poem of a toxic relationship I was once in with a seasoned manipulator.

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I think some people like manipulating others to get this strong feeling of power which is like a drug to them. I've had a similar experience in the past but as soon as I came to know I was being manipulated, I returned the favour. So, in a way, I've been the manipulator too. Although not on my gain but as revenge..

You've portrayed this beautifully. It casts a clear picture on the reader.
Nicely penned and a powerful read for me.😊👍

Posted 1 Year Ago


You clearly have a vivid understanding of how such relationships work, using emotion long before the fist. This is a brilliant piece :) You were successful in making your reader feel what it was like to be there. Congratulations! I.I.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Killer good close! I love the power in those lines. Very nicely crafted. We can rise victorious through the storm. Changed but stronger than before. Such seasons of life are character building journeys. Brilliant crafting and word choice. Regards Ray

Posted 1 Year Ago


Danie

1 Year Ago

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it ☺️
This poem is a bit close to home for me, as I was in a toxic relationship that caused some bad trauma (like my belief that love doesn't exist, and that the things needed to continue a good relationship are contradictory, etc etc.). Regardless, enough about me, and more about the poem. The poem gives a very clear, strong, and imagery-filled message. I always love that in writing, when I can visualize what's happening in great detail. The ending was great, as Asante has stated. The one thing that threw me off was "stronger through the trees". Why the trees? Why not something taller? Perhaps it means that you still have room for growth, and it's a reference to the little paper fragments you once were. If it is the latter, then fantastic job on being able to think of all that. If it isn't, the English education in the US is getting to me. Overall, fantastic writing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


CK_85

1 Year Ago

In the United States, you spend ages 5-10 learning how to properly write paragraphs and essays for y.. read more
Danie

1 Year Ago

The English education system is exactly the same in a way! Fascinating how much nonsense they push i.. read more
CK_85

1 Year Ago

"Sometimes a cigar is just a cigar." -Sigmund Freud
In my mind, this ended strongly. I got into this and enjoyed it from beginning to end. You used a lot of words that are pretty typical of words that I may use; the writing style is similar, and I won't lie in saying that put a little smile on my face.

Overall, a fine write here. Simple, but graceful, as well as one that I could to relate to.

On a side note - Hey!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Danie

1 Year Ago

Thank you I'm glad you could relate! Also, hello back! ☺️
I suppose this is a great learning curve. Now you know what to look for.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Danie

1 Year Ago

Yes exactly! Thank you for reading, Paul. 😊
Excellent poetic journey from victim to victor - always sad to learn the hard way - but coming out stronger is a good thing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Danie

1 Year Ago

Thank you! You understood the poem perfectly. It was in no way an expression of love or the love we .. read more
Phill Oz O'fee

1 Year Ago

Kudos my friend

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Added on February 21, 2017
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Tags: Relationships, depression, toxic, freedom

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Danie
Danie

Derby, Midlands, United Kingdom



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