drowning in my thoughts

drowning in my thoughts

A Poem by soldier onwards
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Depression eating away at my mind

"

that's it,

im nearly gone,

i'll never fit,

I guess it's never done,


the voice breaks my walls,

they say stupid s***,

they dig in their claws,

im dumb i'll admit,


they stare,

they snicker,

do they care,

if I die quicker?,


the rumors spread,

they voices scream.

I wish I was dead,

my mind splitting at the seems,




© 2017 soldier onwards



Author's Note

soldier onwards
sorry if you feel the same

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This is so heartbreaking. I remember when there was a time when I didnt want to live either, it took me years to scratch , claw and dig my way out of that f*cking mess . Your poem is beautiful and tragic and i hope that writing helps exorcise those thoughts.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

I try to.. some times it works sometimes not so much you know?
Artist in Hiding

11 Months Ago

yes i do unfortunately. just keep working towards life, i promise it's worth it, even if right now i.. read more
soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

thank you and I will



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This is so heartbreaking. I remember when there was a time when I didnt want to live either, it took me years to scratch , claw and dig my way out of that f*cking mess . Your poem is beautiful and tragic and i hope that writing helps exorcise those thoughts.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

I try to.. some times it works sometimes not so much you know?
Artist in Hiding

11 Months Ago

yes i do unfortunately. just keep working towards life, i promise it's worth it, even if right now i.. read more
soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

thank you and I will
Your poems paint pictures. I'll keep saying it until it's not true anymore.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As someone who'd recently dug out of a pit of depression, I feel your poem to be a voice. Pat on the back for you!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

thank you so much
This is a very interesting take on what it means to feel these kinds of emotions. A lot of poems that I have read try to mention the struggles real quick then jump away to something empowering. But this does a good job of showcasing that feelings like these doesn't go away as easily as we would like them to. The word flow and stanza breaks work really well here. I really felt the power and emotion behind each piece of this poem. Very well done.

Posted 11 Months Ago


soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

thank you
Actually, I don't, but if I did, I'd seek therapy and medication.

Posted 11 Months Ago


soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

im in constant therapy and I take medication.
thanks for the review but that sounds harsh fro.. read more
John the Baptist

11 Months Ago

Did not mean for it to sound that way. I worked in mental health for many years, and therapy and me.. read more
soldier onwards

11 Months Ago

oh im sorry for taking it badly now thank you for giving me a review anyway

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people judge what they cant handle. I judge what I can't help. every second was painful enough... but to relive it.... it kills me. more..

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