i did it again

i did it again

A Poem by soldier onwards
"

I'm sorry

"

I'm sorry I said what I said

but I'm not the one

who wants me dead

just for a kick simple "fun"

surprise, surprise

glass like eyes


little chatter rings

wordless story told

every bird sings

young and old

surprise, surprise

glass like eyes




© 2017 soldier onwards



Author's Note

soldier onwards
feeling strange

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I like the imagery. I like the flow. I may need to come back to this in order to verify whether or not I understand it. The refrain is poetic, but I can't seem to grasp how it fits into the poem. Are we painting a metaphor for blindness or very cryptically scolding in a "Kettle calling Pot" kind of way. Nicely written and worded at any rate. Well done!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like the imagery. I like the flow. I may need to come back to this in order to verify whether or not I understand it. The refrain is poetic, but I can't seem to grasp how it fits into the poem. Are we painting a metaphor for blindness or very cryptically scolding in a "Kettle calling Pot" kind of way. Nicely written and worded at any rate. Well done!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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soldier onwards
soldier onwards

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people judge what they cant handle. I judge what I can't help. every second was painful enough... but to relive it.... it kills me. more..

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