katie? oh katie

katie? oh katie

A Poem by DarkArtz 0703
"

This is what its like when I think I'm getting better but then something happens to make me depressed but it all makes me strong after I figure things out.

"

Katie? what have you done?

... nothing I swear

Katie its okay I'm here for you

... go away....your not there

what do you mean Katie? its all in your head?

no it cant be.... you died... your dead!


Katie look at me! see what you've done!?

go away... please leave me alone..

I'm in your head.... I got to you... I won

 the only thing left of you is the messages and photos on my phone

your wrong Katie... I am you

your not me... your nothing like me...


Katie don't you see

what do you mean?

I am you and you are me

but your nothing I've ever seen

the same scars from your elbow to your hand

that's impossible .... I don't understand



Katie you are just like me

but I'm nothing like you

give in... you'll be free

I can't.... that's not the truth

Katie your nothing without me

but I am something... im trying to be me

© 2018 DarkArtz 0703


Author's Note

DarkArtz 0703
working on it

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The only thing that's awkward about this poem is that Stanza 2 Line 4 is a tad too wordy. The inner monologue that the poem goes through is fantastic. There are moments where it's not clear that it IS an inner monologue (the "you died....you're dead" part seems like a ghost of someone long gone), so I would take a look at that aspect. But the whole idea is grand, and your execution of the theme is fantastic! Well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

5 Years Ago

thank you E.
~k
emipoemi

5 Years Ago

my pleasure.



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A battle of will's.some days you win some days you lose.but it's the war for your soul you must conquer.reading this I can feel you have so much fight in yourself left to use

Posted 5 Years Ago


it is a sad poem but stay strong

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The only thing that's awkward about this poem is that Stanza 2 Line 4 is a tad too wordy. The inner monologue that the poem goes through is fantastic. There are moments where it's not clear that it IS an inner monologue (the "you died....you're dead" part seems like a ghost of someone long gone), so I would take a look at that aspect. But the whole idea is grand, and your execution of the theme is fantastic! Well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkArtz 0703

5 Years Ago

thank you E.
~k
emipoemi

5 Years Ago

my pleasure.

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Added on April 18, 2018
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DarkArtz 0703
DarkArtz 0703

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