why?

this is my first environmentalist poem....

after the day ends in the life

of a new young soul we ask

why?

 

after the world is smothered

in our own creations

why?

 

after the lives of the innocent

are taken away by the unjust

why?

 

after the hope that flickered

in every corner is extinguished

why?

 

after all that was good has been lost

to the dark despairs of humanity

why?

 

after the oceans rise

and the planets warms

why?

 

after the planet is killed

and the humans move on

why?

 

after the last spark of good

has been driven out by evil

why?

 

after the last human dies

from our own selfishness

why?

 

why must we kill?

why must we hate?

why must we destroy?

 

After the planet is killed

After the innocent die

After the homes are burned

After we realize what we have done

 

We will look and ask…why?

 

Author's Note

does it flow well
does the language fit nicely

Reviews

[ALifeAquatic]

I agree with both reviews of this piece, but I would also argue that the positives wipe out any of the negatives.

This was an intense write, the imagery is dark, it's actually rather bold and incredibly thought provoking, what I loved about it above all was the way in which it built up to the crescendo of the last two stanzas, to then end with, "We will look and ask�why?" Was a brilliantly subtle touch that adds to the poem and forces the reader to remember it long after reading it!

Thank you for entering this in, "Be Experimental!"

[THERISA]

Your poem flow gently, moving the reader through it. More importantly, you keep to the central core of the message, which you are asking of the reader. I wish i had the answer to your question, beyond the simple, we can and just do so. Thank you for taking a risk, by sharing this poem with us.

[Helen Renee]

wonderful flow and it feels well with our socity today we always ask why and dont do anything about things to stop it from happening

[Justin D]

The language is definitely descriptive enough but the only bad part about this poem is that it could be better written (such as periods and exclamations and caps and stuff). but very good. these questions all need to be thought of. keep it up

[J.R Schlievert]

good flow and good vocabulary! and its very intense