Muddled Thoughts

Muddled Thoughts

A Poem by DarkRainbowPie
"

Love is a confusing thing, and the mind works in unusual ways. Here is just my own personal example of that. :)

"

I started this off with something to say,

There was a point...but it flew away.

 

Oh, wait, there it is!

 

But...oh...it's relevance seems to be gone.

Vanished. Poof. Gone away with the dawn.

 

For now it is night.

 

Dark. Alone. Cold. I pull the quilt over my head,

Rolling from side to side, in this large empty bed.

 

Wait, where the hell am I?

 

I sit up, I peer out the curtain,

My surroundings, unfamiliar, my mind, uncertain.

 

Someone walks by the window.

 

What?! Who is he?

I lie back down, wondering if he has seen me.

 

The door opens.

 

I look up, at a familiar face,

Oh the comfort, when I finally know my place.

 

I smile in his direction.

 

Ah, my memory pulls through!

My eyes now see through the misty hue.

 

He gets into the bed beside me.

 

My point flies back, nestles in my brain,

And now I know what I was about to say.

 

I'm in love.

 

 

 

Yes, that is all...

 

© 2015 DarkRainbowPie


Author's Note

DarkRainbowPie
Just wrote this as I went along, took maybe 10 minutes? Not sure if it's that good, but I like how it turned out anyways :) All feedback is greatly appreciated, thank you!

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I like how you presented this.. I liked the suspense and to be honest this feels so real like anyone could feel this way and for that fact it's written well cause when the reader can relate to material and be like hey that could be me, i'm alone in this big empty bed.. but alas babygirls in the shower!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Thanks very much :) Always good to know you've written a relatable piece c:
KeeD

11 Years Ago

haha haven't written a relatable piece as yet at least I don't think i have, it's just that I can re.. read more
DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

No bother, thank YOU for the review :)


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This was cool. Suspenseful, yet comical and cute. I love writings that express the omnipresent thought process. Very unique!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Haha, aw, thank you very much! :')
a bit obscure, it's meaning trailing away into another, leaving the reader almost guessing, yet revealing itself in the end all the same. an interesting approach to be sure.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on it :)
Invisible

11 Years Ago

you are welcome :)
love the 10 minute writes very nice thank you for sharing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Thank YOU for the review! ^_^
I like how you presented this.. I liked the suspense and to be honest this feels so real like anyone could feel this way and for that fact it's written well cause when the reader can relate to material and be like hey that could be me, i'm alone in this big empty bed.. but alas babygirls in the shower!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Thanks very much :) Always good to know you've written a relatable piece c:
KeeD

11 Years Ago

haha haven't written a relatable piece as yet at least I don't think i have, it's just that I can re.. read more
DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

No bother, thank YOU for the review :)
HEY!!!! that sound like my brain, bouncing from thought to thought like a kindergartener on a sugar high, especially when it comes to love. Love is such a confusing thing, nicely done :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Haha, it's hard to stay focused sometimes, isn't it? :) Thanks very much ^_^
C.C. Marx

11 Years Ago

It really is!! My pleasure
good...that's what poems and all writings are for jauting down ideas

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Thanks ^_^
Wow, this is really cool. I have the worst memory so I can understand :) Awesome poem :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Haha, thanks very much :)
The Nude Writer

11 Years Ago

Ps.. Dig your specs :)
DarkRainbowPie

11 Years Ago

Aha, thanks :'D

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Added on February 1, 2013
Last Updated on January 26, 2015
Tags: Love, Uncertainty, Confusion, Thoughts, Wonder, Comfort, New Surroundings

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DarkRainbowPie
DarkRainbowPie

Dublin, Ireland



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Hey there, guys. My name's Annie, I'm 18, from Ireland. All there is to really know about me is that I am a MASSIVE nerd (...would like to wager that I actually do live and breathe science at .. more..

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