March 2nd 2010

The bloody ink dried on March 2^nd

The last shovel of dirt was turned

It violently slams against the coffin

The last tear in the crowd collapsed to the ground

My name whispered and cursed around the masses

Hidden love in grained between a man and a woman

 

A damaged and dying rose

Her thorns never harmed me

But when she was gone

I became broken

A heaven separates us

Her last spoken words rings in my ears

But she left with me one thing

“You are going to find someone someday”

 

But years passed and when the dark was consuming me

The light came. My ghost was right.

She couldn’t have picked a better person to send me.

Some way, she showed me.

The perfect completion of my complicated life

You came into my dark deadly world.

You stayed for it all.

 

You said bittersweet song lyrics

But promised a happy conclusion

Who would have guessed?

It was you who would deliver it

And it will always be you

Forever

Reviews

[Victorious]

Dear Reaper,

IDK, the poem seems to sift throughout the whole structure. You take us to different areas of a life from death to life. Not sure if I liked the second stanza in the beginning cause it felt like you busted out with roses and thorns and then abruptly went to life and death. I think it's because you switch tenses a lot. The flow is choppy, but the diction is good. I liked "a heaven separates us" and "My ghost was right." As for the idea of it though, it was good. This sounds like a story, rather than a poem, but it was good to read and was very touching.

Thanks for sharing!

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[UC Poika]

I hope she finds it pleasing. The contrast is there.

[Poetic Beauty]

Wow.the ending.of.a magical relationship which after.many years.leads to another. That doesn't happen often in life. Very deep.writing and the emotions in this piece say it all

[Shy Girl]

Stunningly deep. I read this and traveled down the page in just...silence. You went from loss...anger...hopeless...to finding strength...compassion...purpose..to love in such a short span.. I was stunned. You write with such passion in your lines..each one says something more than the words themselves. *blink blink* It's nice to see such a harsh time be followed by something sweet and worth the struggle to find. It means that much more when it is found. Treasured and held close. :) D you're making me cry... :)

[Reaper]

I'm glad you liked it :D

[PoppySilver]

Outstanding! Really :)
I loved this...took me to a new place of emotion, awesome xoxo

[TKBickel]

Good god man you are going to ruin my mascara.
On top of your game as always.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh how sweet, I love this. Just truly capturing, feeling felt, touching... thank you for sharing, enjoyed and love it all.

[Robert The Frank]

It!