when twines become tangles

F.T.W. Doesn't mean F**k The World TIL

when did the twine become a tangle

why has my life become a book

I've broken down to your elements

it was just your smell

it was just that look

it's the way you f**k

it's the things you cook

I can find you in a bottle

I can rub you out

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

Awesome to see you post again. :)

Honestly, I think that this is one of the very, very few poems that I've ever read that has such a strong sense of rhythm and flow by itself that it doesn't need punctuation. Same thing with the repetition; it usually drives me absolutely crazy, but this definitely accomplishes what it needs to without becoming dull or monotonous. Awesome piece.

[wolfshrew]

the way you f**k

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

raw and gnashing soul spilled glory~ your structure is flawless~ perfect emotional pitch~