I was told to ask you,

© by S. D. Blankenship on November 2, 2011 at 10:19pm

I was told to ask you,
When I’m in need.
When I cannot feed.
When people are p’d.
And so full of greed.
When my life has weeds
I ask upon you to please
Just listen to my needs.

I was told to ask you,
When one night I see
It’s cold enough to freeze.
My skin cracks and bleeds
I’m down on my hand and knee
When I’m sick and feel so teased
Please won’t you even help me?

I was told to ask you,
When life is no longer at sea.
And darkness is all I can see.
I ask you the words I read.
The blue waters are now green.

I was told to ask you,
But I see you’re just to mean.
I need you now, but keen
I think I’ll just get up and leave.
Thanks for the hurt you breath.
And tomorrow my life will deem.
 
I was told to ask you.
Thanks for giving life you gave to me.
For in the end, Mark Twain
Told me ‘Twas all just a dream.


© 11/02/2011 By S. D. Blankenship

Reviews

[Dove]

Wow, as soon as I started reading this poem I got into it. This piece has a very nice flow and there have been times where I felt like I was abondoned because I was told by someone to always come to them but they never were there for me. You wrote this poem beautifully. I really do love it. Amazing job!

[Rev. Fr, S. D. Blankenship DDiv., PhD., MA.]

Thank you, Smarie. :)

[Dove]

You are so welcome

[Bats In The Belfry]

full of emotion, nicely done!

[Isobella Rose]

This poem has a very nice flow to it. I love the ending also. Good work :)

[R.O.M.E.T.S.I.]

This is a very good poem. However, I think the ryme muddys the meaning. Some of these lines ryme, but don't mean anything. Alot of songs are like that. Maybe I just don't know what I'm talking about, but I'd shorten a couple stanzas to clarify the meaning. Good job!

[Forgotten]

wow i like it alot :)

[Seshat Nidaba]

I could be wrong, but something tells me you'd make amazing comic literature. Is my instinct true?

[Rev. Fr, S. D. Blankenship DDiv., PhD., MA.]

Hm, It might be.

[Revolutionary]

A masterpiece.You will recieve no help with your fantasies you have to move along.It is only real if you witness it.I love the poem

[Rev. Fr, S. D. Blankenship DDiv., PhD., MA.]

Oh---err---thanks.

[Grace Catherine C.]

This is beautifully written, haunting in a way. Very nice.

[HeIsWe]

cool i like it