Happiness

Happiness?

Does it really exist?

Can you find it in money?

Or in the high dollar shoes on your feet?

Is it a food?

Can you call it a tweet?

Was she ever mine?

I still think of her no matter what the time.

Was I just her puppet?

Someone on a string?

I helped her.

She gave my a fling.

But kept the ring.
The ceiling now as blue as the sky.
Happiness, where did she go?

Was it all just a no-love-show?

Reviews

[AriaxNasies]

"She gave my a fling."
I think "my" should be changed to "me"

I liked this poem. It's philosophical without being overly deep, it's simplistic but clear, and the reader can get a feel for the emotion of the piece.

"Happiness, where did she go?
Was it all just a no-love-show?"

I think those two lines were my absolute favorites in this poem. They go together incredibly well; they are within the whole work almost a separate poem.

Well-written and very to-the-point. Good work!

[M. Kari]

Life makes one wonder sometimes :)

[ZmH]

this is the first time ive read your work, i feel bad to admit that but i truly have been missing out. i love the raw emotion in this piece the last two lines are so strong.

[Marble Mountain]

This is wonderful and I agree with all the reviews. You kept it simple but broached a deep topic. Great imagery and eloquently worded.

[Eloha]

A ridiculous idea came to me while reading this poem, I wonder if tweeting makes people more happy! Do you think so?

You certianly confronted this topic in an original and readable way. Thanks SDB.

[The Cobra Lounge]

She gave me a fling but kept the ring...lol, this made me smile. I hope this was not inspired by real events? This was a fun poem to read...you need to write more poems..they are quite amusing. :))

Muse

[EileenMarie]

I love this... Cute but serious... Happiness masked itself in many forms and eludes us often.. Great job!

[Michael G.]

Interesting, fun write. While most might sound bitter and glum... you maintain an upbeat quality.
Good pace. Well done.

[Young Dreamer]

in line six you say "tweet" do you mean sweet? and in line 12 is "my" supposed to be me? other then that i like you poem alot:) i love reading poems like this because different people depict it in different ways:) good work!:)

[S. D. Blankenship]

No, It's Tweet, It's a long story.

[Young Dreamer]

lol alright:)

[S. D. Blankenship]

Ha-ha. Yeah.

[writingcrazy55555]

Nice piece, simplistic but meaningful. Great job! :)