Purple Rain

Raindrops fall through the clouds.

To make rainbows of many colors.

To fall to the earth and purify the air.

To give smiles to the wonders of children.

To be hope for the lost.

It comes from the angels.

They mourn the loss of another soul.

As it falls down, down upon the ground.

Making people cry to share the sad feeling.

Can it feel the pain of others?

Flowers grow anew in it's soil.

As the lightning crashes after the tears fall.

The darkness that will often follow.

Still the rain falls making it's way past the rainbows.

As it goes away.

The world seems to be brighter.

And grow with life.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I like the rain...it's cleansing and beautiful in so many different ways, though still has the propensity for destruction.

A couple little things. A few of your lines are a bit off...like the last line:

And grow with life. (I think it would be better as "And growing with life" or "And anew with life", something like that)

Little things, just little things. Still the idea is interesting.

[Michael G. Smith]

Like this. Rain is a great theme for poetry because poetry is contained with in it. becareful with starting too many lines with the same word. It detracts from your impact and using the's when not needed. for example line one; read it without the the. Line two start with making instead of to make (when you use words ending in -ing you are putting the reader in the now of your read). Try starting line three with Then. Fourth line a slight rearrange "gives hope to the children of wonder". Sometimes presenting the line or idea in a different order catches the reader for a second more. Tell me what ya think. This is your oem so I don't want to go to far. I'm thinking we should collaberate. Let me know. I have these two lines for a poem but so far i can't get past them.

[~*. Jade Black .*~]

I actually kinda just wrote this so..I might just delete it not every poet can write something good every time.

[Michael G. Smith]

I was just sharing some of the things I've have learned over the last few years. I didn't mean to say that this was bad in anyway. I get a little technical. I used to be on a different site LULU and there was this teacher of poetry Susan and she used to show me how to write my lines in different ways as to bring out more from them. I miss her insights, they it helped me to progress so much more than all the people giving me hollow accolades. I see you as a great writer or I would never have commented on your writing. I am not won to say someones poetry is bad. If I don't like something I just refrain from commenting. That's teh way mom taught me. Hey, come over to my page and share your insights or even rip me apart if you do it gently, please?

[~*. Jade Black .*~]

I will review some of your writing I will just have to do it at a later time I'm quite busy in my life right now but don't worry I will come to review which ones i like.