Boy Casanova

It heavily snowed outside . A boy of eleven leaned on a window to watch snowfalls pile up, blocking a house entrance. It always made his dad angry for he was the only man in house. A mother was a delicate patient woman who always took her time before she made any act or response.

Boy snapped out from his snowy daydreaming. Bored, he turned himself around and sat on his comfy squeeky chair. He raised his look to see picture of him and his parents having jolly time. Next to it was another picture of him and a girl, in fact, holding their little hands together , and blushing away each to own side.

The boy opened his drawer, lifted up white paper. He centered paper in front of him then he reached for his pen; green pen, it was his favorite color though the pen looked green it was writing blue.

"My dear Sandy" was stated on top of the paper. He straightened up himself like a serious  men do, he cleared his throat loudly like his dad does. But then, he stood up and walked away to sit in front of his TV .

Just like his dad does. 

Boy`s true love was anime, and a girl was like a snow; she fell on his mind, but he snapped out of it.

Reviews

[ResiNoth]

I think this piece as a whole is lovely. The disjointed style is actually rather pleasant, but I think making sure to have the commas and periods/capitalization correct would really help it be clear that these are not accidental fragments but intentional. I also think setting of "just like his dad does" as a separate paragraph might be interesting. Or moving it up to be part of the same paragraph. The last sentence I'm torn on. I love the description of the girl as being like snow, but sandwiched between the anime and him snapping out of it I get confused on. Anyhow, all just my initial reactions, take what you will from it :)

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I appreciate time and effort you invested in reading . I struggle with grammar a lot . It is one of my many obstacles. Ones I get entirely comfy with depths of language I swear I will dazzle the world with everything I write :)

Again, I appreciate..

[ResiNoth]

haha, well, I think you already do a good job. And sometimes working around a language barrier just makes for more unique and interesting word choices!

[Bear]

English is the hardest language for we have so many words that sound the same but have different meaning and once you throw in all the slang words that we use, it can take years to understand it all, heck i don't know half of it myself and I have been reading, writing and speaking it my whole life.

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I appreciate your understanding, support, and motivation, papa-Bear !

[Sea Light]

This is a sweet story. I like the blossoming love between our young boy and Sandy.
You do have to pay close attention to punctuation. And I'm not sure if the part of the mother and father fits at the beginning of the story. Maybe you can add that part when the boy looks at his parents' picture.
Maybe reword the last sentence, and it can probably work. I love how you compare her to snow. It's poetic and you should keep that part.

I think this is a nice little story and maybe you can make a bigger story out of it. You did a great job!

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Hello you :)

As always, I appreciate your honesty and time. I have my struggles with fractions, punctuations and comfort when it comes to complex / or precise expressing. Any advise or any help is more than welcome.

I appreciate your attention and investment as always .

[Sea Light]

Of course! I'm always happy to help, anytime.