Bloody Dawn

 Land spliting in two

 "Is that you?"

 But to answer your call is a hiss

 And to follow a bite showering fangs, bloody bliss

 

 Night sky has never been darker

 And the moon is laughing at death

 The crowds run, their chances are starker

 Blood shed on the final breath

 

 Fangs from the shadows, death from the unseen

 You're left rotting in the ground with a neck so unclean

 Taking the earth, with demonic looks in their eyes

 If they die, than shall the lies

 

 Satan's the church's best freind

 But can the unseen be the foe

 To those who see blind

 And shall the unseen creat a new flow

 

 Mass interuptted by glass shattering

 And the crowd is scattering

 Shall their deity save them, or shall their blood stain the fangs

 Now their hope in the distance hangs

 

 Now blood stains more than the fangs

 But also on the carpet which liers walk upon

 And for others hope never hangs, it's their ignorance that hangs

 Like a rope choking the criminal, seeing bloody dawn

 

 

Reviews

[Ana Drake]

Darkly beautiful.
A real vampire poem, I love it.
Especially the third stanza.
Great write. :)

[David the writer]

Thanx, I'm true to vampires. I want the world to see vampires how I do. Like how Dracula was except different here n there

[Ana Drake]

I can understand. Dracula never did it for me, I'm not big on religious vampire stories. Though don't get me wrong I respect the creation, I just like my vampires warm, alive, and starving.

[David the writer]

The Dracula I saw when I was a kid was bloody, freaky, and most of all wicked. Religion has nothing to do with the vampires I creat. In this poem they were killing the church but that wasnt the only people they were killing. So in the end it balanced out

[Ana Drake]

Which Dracula?

[David the writer]

I don't remember. That was when I was like 5.

[Ana Drake]

I've only seen one, it was really old. Like 1960's, but there was so much religion mixed in that I couldn't get into it. Not all monster live beneath the gods. ;P

[David the writer]

No, but some tend to. I've dugg my fangs into some vampology before. From what I've heard it didnt mention gods or anything like that but sometimes people put them beneath gods. It's like that whole good vs evil. Really as a satanist I dont see good vs evil, I see people's delusions.

[Ana Drake]

I like the way you see things. ;)

[David the writer]

;) A true was born a true

[Ana Drake]

Lol, whatever ;P

[David the writer]

:p muhahahahahaaaa >XD

[Amanda]

You spellied liar wrong in the last stanza, otherwise its good. My favorote stanza was the first

[David the writer]

thanx!