You Can't Come In!

‘If only we could go back,’ he said,

‘To dot all the ‘i’s and ‘j’s,

I’d certainly have a Captain Cook

Again, at my wayward ways.

You must admit that it started well,

There was lots of love to begin.’

She said her piece through a crack in the door,

‘There was, but you can’t come in!’

 

‘But surely there’s time to talk it out,

We’ve been together so long?’

‘You said you’d talk, but you’d only shout,

The things that you did were wrong!’

He slumped against the post of the door

And thought of the things he’d said,

‘If only you’d let me in once more,

Without your love, I’m dead!’

 

‘There hasn’t been love for many a year,

That flew when you made your choice,

You said, “I’ll be working late, my dear,”

When really, you went with Joyce.

You treated me like a perfect fool

When you came in late in the gloom,

And crawled in bed with your back to me,

I could smell her sweet perfume.’

 

‘She never meant anything then to me,

She doesn’t mean anything now!’

‘That may be true, but I’m telling you

That marked the end of my vow.

I should have cut you adrift before

But I had nowhere to go,

So now, you’d better go find your w***e

Or sleep outside in the snow.’

 

‘How could you be so cold and hard

With all that long in the past?’

‘I’ve taken a look at that self-same book

And found me some love at last!’

She stepped aside from the open door

And he thought she’d given in,

But a man stood solid, blocking his way

And he said, ‘You can’t come in!’

 

David Lewis Paget

Reviews

[Foxemerald]

I suppose that she better go find his lady, then. It looks as though he's been well taken care of by his wife, at least in this case . . . but, perhaps- just with a bit of luck, she may open her door the next time. And, at that point, perhaps he will make another male friend!

[AprilRN1210]

now that is what I call an ending! Karma is so much fun sometimes.. This one had such a playful rhythm, yet cut a little with its regret, longing, agony, and resulting punch to the face.. very nicely done. I enjoyed and admittedly giggled...

[Claire in VA]

What's good for the goose is good for the gander!
Entertaining!

~Claire

[Valentine]

Chuckling...the payback is hard to take sometimes. Terrific and witty write,,,lol Kathie

[KWP]

ahaaa well why not I say ... hurt travels both ways ...

she held her grudge for many a year and then found a new love on her doorstep ...

nice work - always with a cheeky twist xx

[Marie]

Oh I see. She was willing to put up with him till she found herself another man...probably one richer...

[TPK Stories]

Another good story David....