Goodbye!

Goodbye!

A Poem by David Lewis Paget

There comes a day when a love that’s frail

Will shatter at a touch,

No matter how long it’s been that way

And has hung together, just,

The storm that gathers at eye and lip

Bursts out of a clear blue sky,

In a day of rage that will turn the page

And will leave you asking why?

 

The clouds will gather, the lightning strike

And the swift torrential rain,

Will tear apart an uncertain heart

And will douse your love with pain,

It matters not if you back away

Or appease a fevered mind,

For words are said that in truth are bled

From a feeling most unkind.

 

You’re torn apart in a retrospect

Of the years you thought were fine,

But now discover that ancient lover

Was keeping tabs on time,

It seems that nothing was ever right

That you did in years before,

The cruel asides and the parting jibes

As they slam that final door.

 

It taints the best of your memories

It empties feelings inside,

It’s like a war with an empty core

Tossed in a sea of pride,

But even then when you can’t pretend

That the end is worth a sigh,

The saddest sound in that dismal round

Is that final word, ‘Goodbye!’

 

David Lewis Paget


© 2015 David Lewis Paget



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Once again your work has left me asking for more, I have no idea how you remain so consistent with such beautiful work. The introduction "There comes a day when a love that’s frail
Will shatter at a touch" just reeled me in, excellent work.

Warren Daniel


Posted 2 Years Ago


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David, your work is raw emotion wrapped in a metaphorical deadly storm. The end of relationship is just that! And you speak true, my friend

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Extremely well written. One of the best I've read in this site.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a beautiful, passsionate piece filled with so much elegance.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"...the years you thought were fine," Oh, this piece brought tears to my eyes! It hit home way deep. Though it doesn't take years. Some of my hardest goodbyes have come from ones I'd have wished to know for years, but our time together was short. Out of a need to be strong, and feeling foolish, I've not really much grieved the last. This has reminded me of that.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tis so sad but true. Beautiful!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So beautiful yet sad, this was a wonderful read. Excellent work

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aho,
In order to write like that, one has lived. Thanks for your words and thoughts. I enjoyed and made me recall.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This one is really powerful.. Crude emotions radiating perfectly..Fantastic write :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Speechless! One of my favorite for sure.. Hats off, respect and love. :D

Posted 2 Years Ago


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This was a pleasant surprise David! I think your many narrative poems have lulled me into the expectation that that was your preferred genre, and I do not always read them because they're always very long and I know that they're going to be excellently crafted. (and I have a very short attention) I'm assuming you have a good body of work that is not all narrative. I have wondered at times if you wrote in a variety of styles and I think this excellent (and relatively short for you) poem proves that you're an even better poet than I thought and I always thought you to be excellent.
Refreshing change of pace for and a pleasant surprise.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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David Lewis Paget
David Lewis Paget

Moonta, South Australia, Australia



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