Obsession

Obsession

A Poem by David Lewis Paget

I’d seen the widow walk back and forth
The length of the village street,
Her veil so black and her dress so long
You’d see neither face nor feet,
She never would speak to anyone
But would simply seem to glide
Within the folds of that mourning dress
Like a slowly ebbing tide.

At first she’d walk at the early dawn
But then she’d be gone by noon,
The light of day would spirit away
Her wandering sense of gloom,
She’d not be seen till the sun went down
When you’d hear the swish of lace,
Catching along the sea wall stone
And whipping around her face.

She never would miss the evening tide
That would bring the fleet back in,
Check every boat that was still afloat
If its catch was full, or thin,
Her only love had gone out one day
With his sails set high to roam,
His boat had floated out in the bay
But he had not come home.

It took a week for the widows weeds
To start to march on the shore,
And no-one dared to look in her face
So deep was the grief she wore,
‘I never knew pain like this exists,’
She’d cry, when she was alone,
But over the next few painful weeks
She knew that he’d not be home.

Then she slowly tore off the widow’s veil,
She gave up the mourning dress,
I watched her enter the world again
Just as beautiful, no less.
It took me months but I won her round,
I’d kept my scheme afloat,
By hiding away the tools I’d used
To sink her husband’s boat.

David Lewis Paget


© 2015 David Lewis Paget



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I really liked the twist at the ending! Great job. And if I can make one suggestion i am not an expert but I think you should put quotations in the title of your poem since it is lengthy. I heard it is a rule in poetry when you write a long poem it is required to put it. I am sure you already knew but since this is a website it is much more candid haha.

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You are a master of twists...well written story...

Posted 1 Year Ago


OMG!!! The twist at the end left me speechless!!! So brilliant!!!! You are certainly one of the best poets I have ever had the pleasure of reading!! I applaud you!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow the ending was totally unexpected, and the obsession rendered well :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, I didn't see that twist coming. A very clever poem; focusing the reader's attention on the widow and away from the narrator. Very well done, David.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a devilish scheming write lol I liked it!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, what a twist. Instant classic! Is this currently, or will this be, in one of your books?

Posted 2 Years Ago


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I really don't know what to say - that narrator has a touch of the Dick Dastardleys about him. I thiught him but an innocent bystander until you made him twirl that long thin greased moustache DLP in the final lines.
Excellent reveal and wonderfully rich trademark DLP-imagery.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Quite a successful evil plan. By shifting the narration it kept the suspense alive till the last line. This time you have outdone yourself.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really liked the twist at the ending! Great job. And if I can make one suggestion i am not an expert but I think you should put quotations in the title of your poem since it is lengthy. I heard it is a rule in poetry when you write a long poem it is required to put it. I am sure you already knew but since this is a website it is much more candid haha.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh Blimey, I wasn't expecting that ending! Loved the surprise twist, you've painted quite a devious picture.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Moonta, South Australia, Australia



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