Enchanted Dream

A Date with Mr. Sandman

                     

  Eased between silken sheets

     I lay alone without embrace

Sandman soon I shall meet

   Drift away to a far off place
 

Strolling down cobblestone

   Hands entwined, eyes aglow

 

In my dreams I’m not alone

   Impassioned kisses overflow

Dance beneath a starlit sky

   Quiet whispers in my ear

 

In my dreams I soar and fly

   Mere illusions strangely clear

 

Flesh to flesh whimpered moans

   Stirring motion atop my bed

 Searching hands freely roam

   Silent yearnings, desires fed

    
Sunrise comes, night has past

  Eyelids dance in dappled beam

 

Sandman bids farewell at last

    Adieu to you ~enchanted dream

 

Author's Note

This was written as a challenge given to me by my friend, Melissa. She is a wonderful poet with a great mind, and is a member here - just type in her name. It was actually composed to be posted under the title: Bewitching Dreams (on another site) but I didn't care much for that title.

Reviews

[Michael X]

"enchanted dream".... sensously enchanted slumber, your words flow as having been effected by lulling
desires surrendering to need, works like this set the readers heart adrift, two things stick out- the
form which is written with simplistic measures, in my opinion simplicity is most effective, specific rhythm
liken to heart's beating for each other- secondly would be the enchantment element of dreams
as dreams have a way of releasing deepest fantasies, when reflected in writing, the possibilities
are endless, which is the great thing about this writing, its a pastel shade of erotica, easy on thoughts,
yet stands with a tone that is surely meant to create a specific ambience of heated passions embraced

[Poetic Injustice]

Very nice. Hauntingly sad.

[C. M. Miller]

"Without embrace." Gave me chills, which made the dream state a place to remain, a place to bridge the gap between sad reality, and the euphoria of of our desires. The short, "drop down" placement of the verse really makes this poem feel like going deeper into the dream-realm, only to "hit bottom," and the reality of day. A nice sigh at the end with that superbly placed, "adieu."

[Jarrai]

Interesting, I was listening to some metal and this poem went perfectly with the guitar solo, pretty good.

[Autumn's Child]

I love this! The format works with it. I can only relate too well to the going to bed alone only to be accompanied in dreams and to wake up wistfully trying to hold on to all that transpired while I was sleeping. Lovely.

[Rich Prince]

A beautiful and sensual dare I say it Dickinsonian lyric in which you make very skillful use throughout of the sibilant 's' sounds that mimic the sound of the body's movement over silken sheets.

There are some lovely compact condensed phrases throughout the poem but the one that stands out from the rest is 'eyelids dance in dappled beam' a beautiful image of the rapid eye movement that goes on while dreaming even as first light is filtering through the window after passing through the fluttering leaves of a tree outside.

[ElJays Nicholas]

This enthralls me in a very strange way. I like it! The format and the line breaks give it an ethereal quality, like in a dream state. I thought maybe I WAS in fact dreaming when I read it. Elegant and peaceful....

[lilain]

Awaking from such a seductive and delightful dream is so bittersweet. I love the way you unravel it, in broken thoughts. Dreams are always so difficult to share with others, the words just cannot convey the feelings, but with each stanza I could 'feel' it.

Well done!

Cheers,
lilain

[Flow]

I like this one also like the others who all ready comment. the really short lines allows the reader to read it fast.. I use this format when I read live, it tells me when to pick it up then i use longer sentences to slow myself down.. good for tempo. anyway. over all i t is a good write~

[alienkid]

i like this one better because it seems to flow more, seeing as how it has a bit of a rhyme scheme, but not so strict to the book, so its a bit of prose too. again, not into the romance theme, but the structure is good.