Hero's who Fell to Love

A short poem of my experience with love while enlisted and over seas.

A timid young man, a mischievous young girl.

Hot steamy nights,
Long drawn out fights.

Passion flows free,
You were never looking at me.

Heads held high, looking ahead.
I should have left you instead.

Towards the future we go,
Who'd you love, I wont know.

A contract, a distant journey.
Promises of love, it really hurt me.

A hero's calling, a bride at home.
Little I knew, digging my own tomb.

War out front, parties at school.
I never wanted to be your tool.

A hero's return, a witty brides guile.
All I ever wanted was to see your smile.

Author's Note

First read the poem through, then read only the top lines together. Then read the Second lines together.

How did you like this? It was influenced on my own affairs while enlisted.

Reviews

[Leon C]

A nice piece of work.

My wife won't forgive me if I don't mention the apostrophe in the title. I might be wrong but I don't think it should be there

[PHFASCES]

I'm really speechless. These are words and messages i would freestyle a lot. I'm becoming a fan of your rhymes. you execute them so perfectly. Thank you for sending the request that i read it. i enjoyed it

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

this is amazing, my friend

[Purnima]

hey,
really heart touching poem. as you have mentioned that it was influenced from your own affairs. it seems u have written this by heart..

[B. Boileau]

Two entirely different thoughts if you read between the lines. A clever piece with emotion. We'll done!
bill

[Riley]

the fact that i can feel all those feelings and feel for you, well you moved me, and it makes me want to hug you and tell you it will be alright. You are a great writer and please continue writing. I think you have a knack for it :)

[Insight "MH"]

Each line speaks volumes, so cleverly written.

Insight.

[Bohrium Guy]

I found this mentally stimulating and well wrote. Your thoughts displayed the right charm and attacking the moment to keep me locked in. Excellent work! Thanks for sharing!

~Rob~

[lostnstars]

I'm in love on how you work on the flow of the poem. It is beautifully written and i like the lines, "Who'd you love, I won't know" and "Promises of love, it really hurt me". Clever poem.
Please keep on writing, you're amazing :)

[Daydreaming]

Thanks so much, I don't write poetry often. Because I feel like its not my greatest strength. But Ill keep posing them from time to time. thanks for the comments, I really appreciate it.

[lostnstars]

It doesn't have to be often though, I think the writing comes naturally when you're inspired or something. But please do post more, I'll be looking forward to it :)

[Peace Will Win]

I really enjoyed this, lots of emotions and amazing work.