Untitled (The Beautiful Woman in My Room)

Untitled (The Beautiful Woman in My Room)

A Poem by Walter Scott Morrison
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This has some deep classic style to it

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You are perfect,
For this moment you are perfect,
Lipstick smeared,
One stocking pulled down,
The warm morning light, cascading,
On your legs,
On the ground,

 

When you touch me, I am aching,
Your breath hanging heavily in the air,
The fire within me craving,
Your tender whispers,
Your luscious stare,

 

 

 


© 2010 Walter Scott Morrison



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Walter Scott Morrison
I think this is a nice Piece. Maybe I'm wrong

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I agree with poetic justice. It's raw and emotional. I would think of more less used words instead of ones like: smeared, aching, or tender. New, unfamiliar words attract more readers. Other than that I liked the subtle erotica and detailed loving of the moment. Keep writing.

-Wella.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Very seductive, I think I'm going to like your work...thank you

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the thoughts and pictures here. It is great when a man can write so beautifully. I hope your writing and experiences continue to grow. Your work from what I have read is fascinating.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short & Sweet. Very well written my friend, I love it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with poetic justice. It's raw and emotional. I would think of more less used words instead of ones like: smeared, aching, or tender. New, unfamiliar words attract more readers. Other than that I liked the subtle erotica and detailed loving of the moment. Keep writing.

-Wella.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Don't question your writing. It is what it is. If your self-consciousness about your work then you have gone mad, it's beautiful and.......deep. I love it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so simple and adorable and emotional. Specific words are used perfectly to show up the beauty and perfection. I love the description :D
I like it

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like.
The emotions so raw, it's style is simplistic and it brings a great imagery to my mind.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem cannot be bashed at all... it's perfect.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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it's raw and emotional. Do you really think it needs revising..? Some things are just meant to be 'what they are' ..to revise could possibly make it lose what makes it special..do think about before you decide to change it..I really like it as it stands...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

its beautiful hun, an image perfectly printed within the words
loved it

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Added on September 10, 2010
Last Updated on October 12, 2010
Tags: love, beauty, woman, lipstick
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Walter Scott Morrison
Walter Scott Morrison

Cullman, AL



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I'm a huge geek that loves art and literature. I love to read and write and watch star wars. There isn't anything better than writing under a tree in the autumn. I'm strange because all I care about.. more..

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