Nothing.....

Nothing.....

A Poem by Deandra Dawn

NOTHING

Considering violence
relocating obstructions
defining servitude
master of nothing
appearance of worth
writhing in nervousness
temptations deter
with an overwhelming magnitude
silently breaking
crashing, burning
ashes to ashes
dust floating into the abyss
again....nothing
nothing but darkness
blind to the future
nothing but silence
deaf to the help
forever trapped
paralyzed with hopelessness

© 2012 Deandra Dawn


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Might this be the view of a Russian noblemen in flight to exile from the Mother land?

An disgraced Prussian officer sitting in a cell, waiting for the hang men to send in the next man?

Or, just maybe. Maybe it is broken man, once pillar of his friends and family, father, husband, beast in the shadow that no one knew?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Great use of words. Each line create thoughts leading the reader to wanting more. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hmm i like the way you word paint voids, this Nothingness piece is so abrupt and to the point which leads fingers back as a sigh of hope in
seeing this nightmare come alive rapture of this poem ...good stuff

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nothingness can be a hard thing to deal with. I like this one a lot. Good work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


A sorry state to be in. Hopelessness is never good. I feel you could really have stopped at "forever trapped" because that automatically gives a sense of hopelessness without needing to actually say it. Just my personal opinion. Some great phrasing here, well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Darkness and being trapped are never good, especially at the hands of others, but when that blooms into a mind filled with fear, then the torture is complete.
That's what I get from this wonderfully written piece.


Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on April 20, 2012
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Deandra Dawn
Deandra Dawn

Orlando, FL



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My name is Deandra Dawn and I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I also go by the name, Ravishing Raven, and I am currently reworking my website. What else is there to know when there .. more..

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