Rainfall

Rainfall

With the absence of color
the variance of clarity
is more than oblivious
to the contumacy of
soundless reckoning
a recoil of blithering
acid perfection
a liquid poison to cushion
the natural compulsion
of a distended uncertainty
the purity of the damp aroma
concealing the betrayal
of the lands barren recluse
while showering dew drops
of posterity
cohering to absolute reduction
of the senses

Reviews

[D. L. Vaccaro]

I love how you use certain words like "recoil", "liquid poison", "distended", "soundless"... it painted the image of a serpent in my mind... add in the damp aroma, showering dew drops, reduction of the senses, acid perfection... it makes me think of a rainforest... so while reading this, despite the more literal views of the lyrics, me... I was transported to a Amazonian jungle, with large snakes at any turn... and here I stand, the lands barren recluse, while my posterity washes away like the rain. It couldn't seem more obvious to me, it couldn't have more colour or clarity... as if it were a diamond... down the drain of distended uncertainty... your words are magic... they take me for a ride. Thank you for the beautiful, awe-striking poem.

[Paul Pruett]

What a really fascinating study of the storm. Wonderfully intricate descriptions

[Deandra Dawn]

Thank you so much...

[Scott Metro]

A poison and a blessing..I guess we damage all we touch in a way.
Nicely done.

Scott

[Laura Maidah]

An image or two might add a pop. It lacks symbolism and depth. Let us see if I like some of your others better, shall we?

[BlackRose]

Love also how you use certain words. I felt as if it's raining on me while I read this, in a good way. Well done.

[Lydia]

This was a really amazing piece.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Deandra, this is lovely and the format of the phone is like a drop of rain.......

[MoriartyMesa]

What I like about this are the dark and bright images. In a few parts I wondered if it was a sad piece in other parts it had more passion, and than ends like the sound of rain just stopping.

[BLACK PRINCE]

beautiful use o words