Lost Youth

Lost Youth

A Poem by AcasualPAWN
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Messed up youth........

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On the brink of a life's phase.
lost participant, YOUTH's social chase.

With dim, pathetic N hopeless gaze.
Standing' shaking' falling' in unyielding emotional maze.

Wishing world's reversal to ancient days.
where emotions' feelings' love' has no place.

Cruel' Animal' Instinct' Survival' Savage'.

© 2017 AcasualPAWN



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I suspect that the great majority of this story still resides in your head. As you read, your intent fr the piece drives you. So every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in your mind. But when you set your words free, you, your intent, and everything about you becomes irrelevant, because it's the words you choose, their placement, and what that suggests to the reader that matters—based on THEIR background, not yours. So for that reader, every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in YOUR mind.

When I read, "On the brink of a life's phase," what can that mean to me? What in the pluperfect hells can "lost participant," mean if I don't know what this unknown person is participating in?

It matters not at all what the words mean to you, because your goal is to evoke an emotional response of the kind the words produce in you, within your reader's mind. Make them feel, not just know. Make them care.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

10 Months Ago

Keep trying DP
Keep reviewing JayG
It's an honour to be able to view such exchanges.
JayG

10 Months Ago

• its meaning will be completed at the end of stanza) with this lost participant, YOUTH's social c.. read more
AcasualPAWN

10 Months Ago

Yes sir................



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I got chills reading this poem. Truly wonderful and expressive, and the capitalisation and use of apostrophe's add much more power to the poem.
Really loved it

Posted 3 Months Ago


Ackward phases of coordination, in the out door, you don't exist they always skip you, dancing cool when your stoned and a grandma bails you out drives you home from your first arrest. These are the things I relate to when I read your poem. It is easier to operate than a time machine and worth a second glance. Bravo
You cold tweak a bit and make it more relatable.
I somehow doubt I'm your normal audience. You could also leave it just as the piece of Art that it is.
Rock on !!

Sheer Terror


Posted 6 Months Ago


It's been a while since i've last been on. You rode a wave with "Lost Youth". This was a pleasure that turned into a treasure. "YOUTH's social chase" seems to be lasting longer and longer with with each year that passes in this day of age. I feel so much more could be said with this one, but maybe that's the point to not say too much. Great poem!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Your drive for writing is truly there and I adored the message behind your work. Beautiful job.

Posted 10 Months Ago


These lines are well describing what you wanna say.
you used very well the words.
I really loved the poem.

Posted 10 Months Ago


You did great job, with words and flow, showing the feelings of those youths, anger, lost, yes and messed up, they need s heart to care, mind to listen, to lit their flame inside, then they can set out by their own selves to life!

Posted 10 Months Ago


This is not a phase! jsdafjjfsdljsdf;l

Posted 10 Months Ago


I suspect that the great majority of this story still resides in your head. As you read, your intent fr the piece drives you. So every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in your mind. But when you set your words free, you, your intent, and everything about you becomes irrelevant, because it's the words you choose, their placement, and what that suggests to the reader that matters—based on THEIR background, not yours. So for that reader, every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in YOUR mind.

When I read, "On the brink of a life's phase," what can that mean to me? What in the pluperfect hells can "lost participant," mean if I don't know what this unknown person is participating in?

It matters not at all what the words mean to you, because your goal is to evoke an emotional response of the kind the words produce in you, within your reader's mind. Make them feel, not just know. Make them care.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

10 Months Ago

Keep trying DP
Keep reviewing JayG
It's an honour to be able to view such exchanges.
JayG

10 Months Ago

• its meaning will be completed at the end of stanza) with this lost participant, YOUTH's social c.. read more
AcasualPAWN

10 Months Ago

Yes sir................
Amazing and so very well written. Great job

Posted 10 Months Ago


AcasualPAWN

10 Months Ago

Thank you for your time and kindness my friend
This poem is very powerful. The words you use to describe how society is today versus back in the old days. Good job!

Posted 10 Months Ago


AcasualPAWN

10 Months Ago

Thankyou for your kind words my friend...

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