Lost Youth

Lost Youth

A Poem by SSR
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Messed up youth........

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On the brink of a life's phase.
lost participant, YOUTH's social chase.

With dim, pathetic N hopeless gaze.
Standing' shaking' falling' in unyielding emotional maze.

Wishing world's reversal to ancient days.
where emotions' feelings' love' has no place.

Cruel' Animal' Instinct' Survival' Savage'.

© 2017 SSR



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I suspect that the great majority of this story still resides in your head. As you read, your intent fr the piece drives you. So every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in your mind. But when you set your words free, you, your intent, and everything about you becomes irrelevant, because it's the words you choose, their placement, and what that suggests to the reader that matters—based on THEIR background, not yours. So for that reader, every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in YOUR mind.

When I read, "On the brink of a life's phase," what can that mean to me? What in the pluperfect hells can "lost participant," mean if I don't know what this unknown person is participating in?

It matters not at all what the words mean to you, because your goal is to evoke an emotional response of the kind the words produce in you, within your reader's mind. Make them feel, not just know. Make them care.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

1 Month Ago

Keep trying DP
Keep reviewing JayG
It's an honour to be able to view such exchanges.
JayG

1 Month Ago

• its meaning will be completed at the end of stanza) with this lost participant, YOUTH's social c.. read more
SSR

1 Month Ago

Yes sir................



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Your drive for writing is truly there and I adored the message behind your work. Beautiful job.

Posted 1 Month Ago


These lines are well describing what you wanna say.
you used very well the words.
I really loved the poem.

Posted 1 Month Ago


You did great job, with words and flow, showing the feelings of those youths, anger, lost, yes and messed up, they need s heart to care, mind to listen, to lit their flame inside, then they can set out by their own selves to life!

Posted 1 Month Ago


This is not a phase! jsdafjjfsdljsdf;l

Posted 1 Month Ago


I suspect that the great majority of this story still resides in your head. As you read, your intent fr the piece drives you. So every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in your mind. But when you set your words free, you, your intent, and everything about you becomes irrelevant, because it's the words you choose, their placement, and what that suggests to the reader that matters—based on THEIR background, not yours. So for that reader, every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in YOUR mind.

When I read, "On the brink of a life's phase," what can that mean to me? What in the pluperfect hells can "lost participant," mean if I don't know what this unknown person is participating in?

It matters not at all what the words mean to you, because your goal is to evoke an emotional response of the kind the words produce in you, within your reader's mind. Make them feel, not just know. Make them care.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

1 Month Ago

Keep trying DP
Keep reviewing JayG
It's an honour to be able to view such exchanges.
JayG

1 Month Ago

• its meaning will be completed at the end of stanza) with this lost participant, YOUTH's social c.. read more
SSR

1 Month Ago

Yes sir................
Amazing and so very well written. Great job

Posted 1 Month Ago


SSR

1 Month Ago

Thank you for your time and kindness my friend
This poem is very powerful. The words you use to describe how society is today versus back in the old days. Good job!

Posted 1 Month Ago


SSR

1 Month Ago

Thankyou for your kind words my friend...
the older generation will walk around, head down, avoiding eye-contact, with collected groups of teenagers which is bad for both groups.
Nice explorative piece SSR

Posted 1 Month Ago


SSR

1 Month Ago

Thankyou for your understanding Tony
thats a really good poem, the emotions are beautifully displayed here, just so beautiful, the rhyming scheme, just perfect.

Posted 1 Month Ago


SSR

1 Month Ago

Thanks for the kind words Anjali
Anjali

1 Month Ago

You are welcome
A very powerful write. In my line of work it has been my observation that each generation loses a piece of connectedness to human spirit and spirituality and become separate from one another. Thank you for sharing..xo

Posted 1 Month Ago


SSR

1 Month Ago

Thanks for passing by Tracey

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