Lost Youth

Lost Youth

A Poem by AcasualPawn
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Messed up youth........

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On the brink of a life's phase.
lost participant, YOUTH's social chase.

With dim, pathetic N hopeless gaze.
Standing' shaking' falling' in unyielding emotional maze.

Wishing world's reversal to ancient days.
where emotions' feelings' love' has no place.

Cruel' Animal' Instinct' Survival' Savage'.

© 2017 AcasualPawn


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I suspect that the great majority of this story still resides in your head. As you read, your intent fr the piece drives you. So every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in your mind. But when you set your words free, you, your intent, and everything about you becomes irrelevant, because it's the words you choose, their placement, and what that suggests to the reader that matters—based on THEIR background, not yours. So for that reader, every line points to images, memories, and events, all residing in YOUR mind.

When I read, "On the brink of a life's phase," what can that mean to me? What in the pluperfect hells can "lost participant," mean if I don't know what this unknown person is participating in?

It matters not at all what the words mean to you, because your goal is to evoke an emotional response of the kind the words produce in you, within your reader's mind. Make them feel, not just know. Make them care.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

6 Years Ago

Keep trying DP
Keep reviewing JayG
It's an honour to be able to view such exchanges.
JayG

6 Years Ago

• its meaning will be completed at the end of stanza) with this lost participant, YOUTH's social c.. read more
AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Yes sir................



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the older generation will walk around, head down, avoiding eye-contact, with collected groups of teenagers which is bad for both groups.
Nice explorative piece SSR

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Thankyou for your understanding Tony
thats a really good poem, the emotions are beautifully displayed here, just so beautiful, the rhyming scheme, just perfect.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words Anjali
Anjali

6 Years Ago

You are welcome
A very powerful write. In my line of work it has been my observation that each generation loses a piece of connectedness to human spirit and spirituality and become separate from one another. Thank you for sharing..xo

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Thanks for passing by Tracey
Honest and strong words written. I was raised as a child during the Vietnam war and I fear. This generation had known only war and rumor. It is sad. In in sixties. Peace and utopia was the goal of a generation. Forgotten now. Thank you for sharing your words and thoughts. You made the reader think. The goal of a writer.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words sir...
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Oh, youth is something we all take for granted, man. I'm only 22, but I sorely miss being a little kid without a care in the world.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

We all miss that phase where we can live with all our ignorance
Yes SSR it can get confusing. Try leaving Nam at 20, money you thought was waiting for you gone, PTSD, college aspirations gone and love with my girlfriend impossible.

Regards,
Al

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Still, best wishes
I feel the words, I can feel this poem. It's raw and it's reality. Great work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Thanks RayNon 9095
The part that I like the best is when you describe that love has no place in this world. I'm agree to that.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Love, i still don't understand it.......
I love this. I really love this.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Its my pleasure
Brilliant. Keep up the good work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AcasualPawn

6 Years Ago

Thanks Imorbid

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Added on August 20, 2017
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