The Sadness

The Sadness

A Poem by Debbie_Philly

The Sadness       

   


              Closing in like an eclipse on a sunny day


              bright with future remaining the figment


              of my imagination left with murky interpretation 



              Beauty is a fading blackness that surrounds


              empty spaces, walls closing, life imploding


              as does my view holding tight to every memory



              through the mind is a pin hole of light half


              filled with hope just enough to hold on to


              Run fast towards the opening before the dimming



             tell the stories write it all down before the 


             dark takes over ascending like a virus .....


             climb out of the dark emptiness stomping out


             the sadness.



              Deborah Kelly ( Debbie Philly) 9/24/13   


© 2013 Debbie_Philly



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Wow. You conveyed so much emotion through what seemed like a single emotion, finding the hope in despair; illustrating the fear sorrow can bring expertly. The layout of the stanzas, flowing from one line to the next, created (for me) a sense of fluidity and, simultaneously, confusion as the sparse punctuation caused difficulty of navigation. This added to the "walls all around" feeling depression is wont to give. The picture you chose fits well, a display of the closing analogy, the light of hope (red dress and lips) seen through a pinhole in the dark (black and white background and character). Absolutely magnificent, I'll have to add this to my library.

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ANM

3 Years Ago

Darkness envelops us all at times... well written!
Debbie_Philly

3 Years Ago

Very true ANM..... it can indeed !!
ANM

3 Years Ago

You are most welcome!



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Stunning and refreshing :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Debbie_Philly

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much again Lynn.. I will be over to your page to read you as well !! :)
Debbie I truly enjoyed your poetry will come back to read more..

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Debbie_Philly

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much Amos.... that means allot... I will be by to read you as well :)
A. Amos

3 Years Ago

You're most welcome
masterfully invoking
drawing us into shadows with each verse.

emotive beauty
sublime


-a friend named ''Dream''

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much Dream.... it means allot that you read and commented... :) Nice to meet you
Debbie_Philly

3 Years Ago

You changed your name ?
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3 Years Ago

yvw. I'll be sure to read others as well. and youre probably noting my full pen name, I like to go u.. read more
This reminds me of something I recently wrote. I love the urgency to capture the beauty of light and happiness & to write it all down before it fades away to the regular desparity of life. Holding on for dear life. Love the contrast. Very nice write!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

3 Years Ago

That you so much.... yea I find myself having to do that allot .... it creeps in.... thank you again.. read more
Absolutely beautiful Debbie...So much hope and inspiration in this piece. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much Smurfett.... always a pleasure to see you and to have you read my poetry.... thank.. read more
tell the stories write it all down before the

dark takes over ascending like a virus .....
there is that urgency, that desperation in this - its a lovely write - but it aches at the same time.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much TL.... yes I feel that urgency allot.... but I only write when inspired... and two.. read more
Wow. You conveyed so much emotion through what seemed like a single emotion, finding the hope in despair; illustrating the fear sorrow can bring expertly. The layout of the stanzas, flowing from one line to the next, created (for me) a sense of fluidity and, simultaneously, confusion as the sparse punctuation caused difficulty of navigation. This added to the "walls all around" feeling depression is wont to give. The picture you chose fits well, a display of the closing analogy, the light of hope (red dress and lips) seen through a pinhole in the dark (black and white background and character). Absolutely magnificent, I'll have to add this to my library.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ANM

3 Years Ago

Darkness envelops us all at times... well written!
Debbie_Philly

3 Years Ago

Very true ANM..... it can indeed !!
ANM

3 Years Ago

You are most welcome!
Yes, reach for the light....it does dim if you don't grab it and hold on. Beautiful images...albeit some dark...throughout your poem. I liked it. Lydi**

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much Lydia :) and very nice to meet you !! :)
A eloquent & intriguing write. Loved the picture you picked as well. It's a captivating beauty within itself. Great work Debbie_Philly. A riveting read. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much Bpoet... so good to see you... I will be over to read you as well... thank you a.. read more

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Hello everyone, My name is Debbie , I have been writing for about 13 years now, I'm 51 years old and live in Philly. I used to have a show on Blog talk Radio called REVERSE with Michael Quigg every o.. more..

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