HIDDEN

Hidden

Dead hands pressed numb cold against glass without a view

Nowhere to run mind on fire no answers to the questions

Buried deep within… bring the shovel if it will help, not

this time these answers are too far hidden.

Time won’t tell time does not heal scars that show no profit.

Let me out desperately banging on walls that were built by

someone that person was not me.

By : Debbie Mills Kelly ( Debbie Philly)

3/24/2014

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAin]

There was a frantic feeling in this poem - the lack of punctuation made it feel breathless and desperate. Curiously, I found the lack of punctuation make me emphasize the poem in different places on the reread. It's strange how the meaning changes when you alter the inflections in your own mind.
There's a sense of being lost in your own darkness, and even if the light managed to get through, it would be a splintered thing.
Well-written Debbie. Keep it up.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes still feel :)

[Emily B]

one day, we will see clearly, i believe it is written somewhere :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Emily !!! :)

[maria ( rose)]

I understand this very well Deb. We all get stuck in moments its just a part of life.
but we can get out of it
for they won't last. It's just another moment. This time it will pass. omg you know how much I love that song & U2?? lol I was thinking of you and do hope all is well with you these days. I have to give you my number so we can meet up one day if you feel up to it:))) xox love you ...

[Debbie_Philly]

Sounds really good Maria would love to meet up.... yes I have been going through allot lately.... thats usually when my muse comes out to play...lol ;) Thank you so much again !!

[maria ( rose)]

lol hello!! your welcome!! ok maybe when the weather gets a little warmer will do something:) I'll inbx you my # on fb

[Debbie_Philly]

Sounds great !! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

This makes no sense to me but what do I know

[Debbie_Philly]

LOL Baby...... thats perfectly of.... sometimes it makes sense and sometimes it doesn't.... it was something I was feeling when I wrote it... thank you for reading :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Opps I meant Ok... not of...lol

[Rita L. Sev]

Reading this brings a feeling of desperation, frustration at those useless scars... An intense and thoughtful piece, Debbie.

[Debbie_Philly]

All of those things are what I felt as I wrote it .... thank you Rita... ;)

[Anand Sehgal]

Nowhere to run mind on fire no answers to the questions

Buried deep within -----

tremendous line. An throttled state of emotion beautifully penned .Loved it :)
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[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Anand for reading :) I will be over to your page !!

[ANM]

Like this it is full of strong meaning! Words make poems not punctuation or form! Well written Debbie,

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much my friend... xo :)

[ANM]

You are very welcome!

[Chris]

Too very, very real... in a world that doesn't look back - nor forward to each selfless hell left inside.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Chris !! Means allot that you understand and read and Liked :) xo

[Chris]

I find you always have thoughts I listen intent to...

[Debbie_Philly]

Awww your the best Chris !! :)

[Thomas Skahill]

This really captures poetic interiority for me. the lack of punctuation and almost fervently questioning tone are testament to this and it's all framed by hands pressed on glass, inferring a trapped observer of the world around them. (at least to me, maybe i've brought to many shovels to this scene.) The only thing that irks me is the capitalization of not, I understand the emphatic implication but feel as though it could be constructed in a more smoothed visual sense.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you very much Thomas.... your right on all counts here.... and yes I was in a fever of sorts when writing it.... you can never bring too many shovels....lol and I appreciate it :). The capital.... I may change that... I was trying to make a point but maybe its not needed in that way... thank you again for reading :)

[Thomas Skahill]

Of course, thanks for sharing. The only reason I bring it up is because I've had plenty of polite scoldings from professors before for that.

[Debbie_Philly]

Oh I take no offence at all I really do appreciate it :)

[Frieda P]

We hide amidst those secrets and scar'd views that life imposes upon our psyche, and sometimes even time doesn't heal those wounds. Well said Debbie, nice to see you back. ;-)

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Frieda.... and yes like I told Cowboy.... Ive been stuck in a moment.... and Im sure I will be again... its just how it is... Thank you again so much !!! Its good to see you !! :)

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure Debbie, hope you stick around! :-)

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you I will.... just need to get out of this funk !!! :)

[Frieda P]

No pressure, just hurry it the fook up will ya? hah ;-)

[Debbie_Philly]

LOL Im trying.... xoxox