Eternal Night

Eternal Night

A Poem by Debra Stevens Edwards (debby)

Eternal Night
A Poem by Debra Stevens Edwards (Debby)
This was inspired by a poem read at w/c

Captured in a gentle hand
Tortured soul of this one man.
Asking but a place to rest
Puts gentle beauty to the test.


Will beauty give this man a place?
As she looks upon his weary face.
Will she aspire and let him in?
To make his heart believe again.

That love can be a gentle flame.
With warmth to heal souls the same.
She might find her hearts desire
Entwine to join his raging fire.

Together will their spirits soar?
In perfect union to heavens door.
Lifted upon wings they will fly.
Until the time has come to die.

They both awake from gentle sleep.
From under the earth buried deep.
To once again let spirits soar in flight.
To share again in an eternal night.

© 2007 Debra Stevens Edwards

© 2008 Debra Stevens Edwards (debby)


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This is lovely, although life has passed love comes together in the
afterlife, very moving and emotional, and the questions asked are so
tender!

They both awake from gentle sleep.
From under the earth buried deep.
To once again let spirits soar in flight.
To share again in an eternal night.

Such lovely imagary Debby, I always love the smooth flow of your
work and the love that comes through.

Posted 11 Years Ago


9 of 9 people found this review constructive.




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Beautiful absolutely beautiful. your other reviewers have almost said it all but I will add. I think your poem tells a story of two very diffrent people from very diffrent worlds that find each other and asre perfect for each other. It is a wonderful poem. It moves me and makes me think of my love.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful piece, lover together after life has faded away into the blackness that is death. Well expressed with good images and a good flow. Enjoyable to read, I hope that more people have the chance to do so.

"Captured in a gentle hand
Tortured soul of this one man.
Asking but a place to rest
Puts gentle beauty to the test.

Will beauty give this man a place?
As she looks upon his weary face.
Will she aspire and let him in?
To make his heart believe again.

That love can be a gentle flame.
With warmth to heal souls the same.
She might find her hearts desire
Entwine to join his raging fire.

Together will their spirits soar?
In perfect union to heavens door.
Lifted upon wings they will fly.
Until the time has come to die.

They both awake from gentle sleep.
From under the earth buried deep.
To once again let spirits soar in flight.
To share again in an eternal night."



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You touched me deeply with your expressions, as you have a gift to reach into ones soul with your written words. Love this and just voted for your piece, its a winner! ~ Judi xo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like the idea of lovers soaring together in an eternal light... especially when one lover was rescued by another... ah! romance!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, there really isn't anything else that I could add to all of the reviews that you have here, debby. This piece is hauntingly beautiful and it gave me chills. Excellent and congratulations on winning first place with it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it's feels like a lullaby . . . soothing and peaceful.

audrie

peace, balance and harmony

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Debbie, this is one of your best and I have to say I loved it and wish I had written it myself..Great job..Put this one in the book..God bless Valentine ... thank you for a very great read!

Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

While I like both of the poems that you've recently posted, I much prefer this one. The meter feels much smoother and I'm a sucker for a happy ending.

The line ...

"Will she aspire and let him in?"

would fit the flow better (to my ear) if it were ...

"Will she choose to let him in?"

That was the only spot that tripped me up and that's just how I heard it. The poem is yours and must sing to your ears, not mine.

It was a very very sweet poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

This is a very somber, but touching love poem. It's well written, with nice descriptions, and I like how it describes love that will never be broken between two souls-no matter what. I really like this certain stanza:

"They both awake from gentle sleep.
From under the earth buried deep.
To once again let spirits soar in flight.
To share again in an eternal night."

I really like this stanza not only because it's well written, but because it really touched me when it expressed that true love between two people will last, no matter what. Plus, the imagery in this piece altogether is very nice.


Well anyways, I really enjoyed this.

Nice job. Thanks for sharing.:)






Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully written, and very creative.
the title drew me in, and your writting kept me.
I loved this.
CK

Posted 11 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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Debra Stevens Edwards (debby)
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Long Beach, CA



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I am a single parent of six daughters. I write as a release of emotions I'm feeling. At times I write to entertain my girls or just because I have something to say. My goal is to publish a book of .. more..

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