The Ghost of Charnley Place

A tall Tale

The Ghost of Charnley Place

This is said to be true story of the Ghost of Charnley Place.
In the window you can sometimes see a lovely woman's face.

At 11:30 pm. You will hear the beautiful music play to lure you in.
Then just at the stroke of midnight the other awful sounds begin.

Now you see Sir Edward Charnley was a man of wealth and power.
Who thought she never loved him, he grew more jealous by the hour.

Still she loved him deeply but he could never see past her lovely face.
She tried to show him the love she had for him he only saw her grace.

Then one day he locked her in an upstairs room and never set her free.
This was just not right, it is not the way their love was supposed to be.

He used her at his whim and convenience and abused her all the while.
Even in his meanness it was said that he was often extremely very vile.

She never stopped loving him even though she was locked in this cage.
Still even though he killed her one night in a treacherous fit of jealous rage.

When he knew what he had done he saw her ghost slowly toward him.
He ran and fell down the steps and as his life's force began to go dim.

He saw her gentle smile as death took him the truth was suddenly so clear.
She had really always loved him and that's why she was quietly waiting here.

That was 60 years ago it is told now that two ghosts with love upon their face.
It is said they still live in love and happiness in that house at Charnley Place.

Debra Edwards
1/10/09


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Debra Edwards

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

Beautiful piece. Beautiful !

I am reminded of a real life experience I had as a younger man.
A grandmother came back from the grave in search of her dead
grandson. She spoke , she identified herself and she called out to
him in the night. She did not intend to frighten me. I was simply
a bystander.

There is so little I can put in a review because this is a nearly perfect
poem. Brevity is always a plus in this type of poetry, otherwise it
is absolutely perfect.

I have told you many times that you are a gifted writer, so I will spare
you the repetition. I would just like to see more new writing from you.

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very well written story/poem. Enjoyed the adventure. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[David Lewis Paget]

Hi Debra,
It's nice to see someone else attempting a narative style for a change. There's not very much of this type of work around, except from among the old, classic poets. I think you could improve this considerably, however, by shortening your line lengths. They tend to be cumbersome.
By the way, as you are in phone contact with our mutual friend Valentine, you might just gently hint that the term she used for what we're working off here, does not mean the same thing in Australia as it does in the States. I'll give you a hint - women have them, men don't! LOL
David.

[Dani California]

I really enjoy stories that have to do with ghosts. This was an interesting and eerie tale.. and left me wondering if this place actually exists? I'll have to google it. lol

You have some very good imagery and a great rhythm, though the lines begin to get longer from the middle into the ending which made me stumble just a tad while reading it aloud. Just a suggestion to maybe crop the lines slightly toward the end to give it a consistent beat throughout. I always have to read mine aloud several times because I am constantly writing off beat.

Overall it was a great tale and definitely a pleasure to read! Nicely done. I look forward to reading more of your work... thank you Debra.

[Valentine]

Debby...loved this when you read it to me over the phone..I am thinking like you..it is similiar to David's writing and I am going to ask him to read it and send you a message..that is if he and his wife are not still working their fannys off in Australia moon light..God bless..love you kiddo..God bless..Valentine

[Fran Marie]

That was 60 years ago, now two ghosts with love upon their face.
Still live in love together in that house at Charnley Place.


An eerie tale of ghostly love, wonderfully penned

THanks for sharing~Fran Marie