Gone away

Are you feeling less lonely today
Are you gonna come out and play
Are you gonna make me go away
Like you do most everyday?

Are you going to leave today
Like you wish for everyday
I don't want you to go away
I want you here to stay and play

I guess I knew you would go away
Now you are gone, everyday
I should have stayed with you to play
I just heard the sad new today

Are you aware that I'm lonely too
Are you aware that I miss you
Are you aware I have nothing to do
When you took your life, you took mine too

Author's Note

Please review honestly. Good or bad. Thank you

Photo Credit: "Alone.." by Dot-Dep

Reviews

[Remember Courage]

This really was a poem that stood out to me. I love how you describe how it led to this. Such as she/he never came out to play or talked anymore. You really did a great job on this one. I liked the last stanza that was really beautiful. In the second to last stanza i thought she might have done suicide, but then you phrased it so sad and regretful in the next lines i was so sad. Suicide is horrible and lonely. You captured this amazingly.
-Courage

[JohnnyMagrinho]

I feel like this was rushed on your part. Having read some of your other work I honestly think you could have done this better, but then again that is part of poetry isn't it? It's expression, whether it's constructed well or hurriedly. It's important to express whatever you're feeling so in that sense it's transparency is well received.